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Nowadays in many countries household waste e g food packaging is increasing day by day What are the causes for that How can this problem be solved v.1

Nowadays in many countries household waste e g food packaging is increasing day by day What are the causes for that How can this problem be solved v. 1
Perhaps the most serious problem threat is affecting our planet at the present time is global warming. There are several reasons for this problem and various measures can be taken by the government and individuals to improve the situation. Firstly, the emission of CO2, which damages the ozone layer from power plants due to the burning of fossil fuels is one of the most major causes for increasing global temperature. As a result, human suffering from extreme weather events, such as flooding, storms. For instance, 2011 Tsunami in Thailand, a large number of people lost their lives. Secondly, deforestation is also factors resulting in the warming of the earth. Obviously, green plant photosynthesis to provide the oxygen they need for humans; however, the number of trees has been completely destroyed; thus, it has not been possible to resolve all the CO2 in the environment. Furthermore, global warming is that heavy petrol consumption from private transports. Admittedly, global warming is damaging people's lives. The government plays a vital role in solving the problem about rising global temperature. The government need to reduce using fossil fuels, and we should have another alternative measurement. For example, the government need to enforce the limits on CO2 emissions of toxic gases from power plant industries. In addition, the government should impose new laws against cutting down trees illegally, such as long-term prison and strict fines. Moreover, the way to solve this problem is that individuals encourage to use bike cycle because it is environmentally friendly. Everyone has to aware of protecting the environment. To illustrate, we should plant more trees to reducing climate change. In conclusion, people are faced with an increasing global temperature problem, but thanks to the efforts and cooperation of the government and individuals will help to improve on this issue.
Perhaps the most serious
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problem
threat is affecting our planet at the present time is
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global
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warming
. There are several reasons for this
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problem
and various measures can
be taken
by the
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government
and individuals to
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improve
the situation.

Firstly
, the emission of CO2, which damages the ozone layer from power
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plants
due to the burning of fossil fuels is one of the most major causes for increasing
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global
temperature.
As a result
, human suffering from extreme weather
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events
, such as flooding, storms.
For instance
, 2011 Tsunami in Thailand,
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a large number of
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people
lost their
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lives
.
Secondly
, deforestation is
also
factors resulting in the
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warming
of the earth.
Obviously
, green
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plant
photosynthesis to provide the oxygen they need for humans;
however
, the number of trees has been completely
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destroyed
;
thus
, it has not been possible to resolve all the CO2 in the environment.
Furthermore
,
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global
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warming
is that heavy petrol consumption from private transports.

Admittedly
,
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global
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warming
is damaging
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people
's
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lives
. The
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government
plays a vital role in solving the
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problem
about rising
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global
temperature. The
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government
need to
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reduce
using fossil fuels, and we should have another alternative measurement.
For example
, the
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government
need to enforce the limits on CO2 emissions of toxic gases from power
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plant
industries.
In addition
, the
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government
should impose new laws against cutting down trees
illegally
, such as long-term prison and strict fines.
Moreover
, the way to solve this
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problem
is that individuals encourage to
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use
bike cycle
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because
it is
environmentally
friendly. Everyone
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has to
aware of protecting the environment. To illustrate, we should
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plant
more trees to reducing climate
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change
.

In conclusion
,
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people
are faced
with an increasing
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global
temperature
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problem
,
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but
thanks to the efforts and cooperation of the
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government
and individuals will
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help
to
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improve
on this issue.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays in many countries household waste e g food packaging is increasing day by day What are the causes for that How can this problem be solved v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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