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Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improve the way people live? v.1

Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improve the way people live? v. 1
In today’s world of modern technology, the method of preparing the food has changed and I think this also has an impact on the living style of people in a positive way. Undoubtedly, during the past, people used to cook food on stoves which was very time consuming method. This way, women did not able to do extra activities for their survival. For instance, a single dish like rice took maximum 1 hour to be ready, but nowadays cooker helps to prepare the same within few minutes. Nevertheless, modern appliances have a more significant impact on the people’s life. Most important of them all is extreme convenience it provides to everyone by saving their time. For example, I am a working woman and I manage my kitchen chores easily with my job. Moreover, the breakfast is being ready within in seconds and I never get late for my work. Furthermore, the modern technology also helps people to eat a healthy diet. A Few years ago, individuals who were working far from their home preferred to eat junk food due to lack of time. Now, every modern thing is available at home and everyone can prepare pizza, pasta and other dishes at their own place easily by taking care of proper cleanliness. According to statistics released by the Department of Health states that today 80% people prefer to eat home-made cuisine. Clearly, latest technological appliances show an incline in the monthly budget of every house, but this makes life of the masses very comfortable by saving their precious time.
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technology, the method of preparing the food has
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in a
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positive
way.

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, during the past,
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people
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used
to cook food on stoves which was
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very
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time consuming
method. This way, women did not able to do extra activities for their survival.
For instance
, a single dish like rice took maximum 1 hour to be ready,
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but
nowadays cooker
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helps
to prepare the same within few minutes.

Nevertheless
,
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modern
appliances have a more significant impact on the
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people’s
life. Most
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important
of them all is extreme convenience it provides to everyone by saving their
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time
.
For example
, I am a working woman and I manage my kitchen chores
easily
with my job.
Moreover
, the breakfast is being ready within in seconds and I never
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get
late for my work.

Furthermore
, the
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modern
technology
also
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helps
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people
to eat a healthy diet. A Few years ago, individuals who were working far from their home preferred to eat junk food due to lack of
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time
.
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Now
, every
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modern
thing is available at home and everyone can prepare pizza, pasta and other dishes at their
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own
place
easily
by taking care of proper cleanliness. According to statistics released by the Department of Health states that
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today
80%
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people
prefer to eat home-made cuisine.

Clearly
,
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latest
technological appliances
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show
an incline in the monthly budget of every
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house
,
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but
this
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makes
life of the masses
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very
comfortable by saving their precious
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time
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improve the way people live? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
258 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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