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Nowadays environmental problems are among the most critical questions What are the causes Would you give at least one possible solution v.1

Nowadays environmental problems are among the most critical questions What are the causes Would you give at least one possible solution v. 1
Numerous working individuals find exercise neither in their work days nor in their leisure time, therefore do they suffer from health issues. I think busy work life and indoor games or laziness are some of the reasons for not exercising, however some motivation can solve these problems. To begin with, in recent times people have been extremely busy with their professional and personal lives. Firstly, to survive in this competitive world, people do overtime and by the time they reach home, it is already late and they are too tired to hit the gym, instead they prefer to sleep and relax. Secondly, even in their free time some people feel lethargic to work out and choose to watch television and play video or indoor games. For example, my neighbour had gained 60 kg weight after adapting sedentary lifestyle, which had contributed to bad health issues like obesity and heart problems. On the other hand, there are several ways in which such problems can be solved. To begin, if people at work encourage each other to take the stairs, they will get some movements rather than just seating or standing in one place. To explain, in my work place colleagues reward each other for taking the stairs. Moreover, in their free time families and friends should motivate each other to go out in parks or on the beach to play or swim. For example, my neighbour has planned out her leisure time one week in a park with family to play and next week with friends on the beach for swimming or playing volleyball. In conclusion, although modern and fast working lives are damaging people’s health, above mentioned few things can be done to reverse health problems.
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days nor in their leisure
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,
therefore
do they suffer from
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health
issues. I
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busy
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work
life and indoor games or laziness are
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reasons for not exercising,
however
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motivation can solve these problems.

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people
have been
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.
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, to survive in this competitive world,
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people
do overtime and by the
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they reach home, it is already
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late and
they are too tired to hit the gym,
instead
they prefer to sleep and relax.
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, even in their free
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some
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people
feel lethargic to
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work
out and choose to
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television and play video or indoor games.
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neighbour
had gained 60 kg weight after adapting sedentary lifestyle, which had contributed to
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bad
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health
issues like obesity and heart problems.

On the
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hand, there are several ways in which such problems can
be solved
. To
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begin
, if
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people
at
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work
encourage each
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to take the stairs, they will
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get
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movements
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seating or standing in one place. To
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, in my
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work
place colleagues reward each
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other
for taking the stairs.
Moreover
, in their free
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time
families and friends should motivate each
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other
to go out in parks or on the beach to play or swim.
For example
, my
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neighbour
has planned out her leisure
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time
one week in a park with family to play and
next
week with friends on the beach for swimming or playing volleyball.

In conclusion
, although modern and
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fast
working
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lives
are damaging
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health
, above mentioned few things can
be done
to reverse
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health
problems.
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IELTS essay Nowadays environmental problems are among the most critical questions What are the causes Would you give at least one possible solution v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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