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It is often said that the only way to access good study programs is to move to a large city. Do you agree with this statement or do you think location is less relevant these days. Use reasons and examples to support your opinion v.1

It is often said that the only way to access good study programs is to move to a large city. or do you think location is less relevant these days. Use reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 1
Despite the development made in the field of agriculture, many people suffer starvation all over the world. This essay will discuss two problems responsible for this deprivation of food; corruption and population growth. The solutions to these problems can be diminishing food wastage and taking measures to control population that would be highlighted in this essay. One of the reasons of people suffering from extreme hunger can be excessive production of food at the restaurants, which is also a kind of corruption. This is because of the poor food management system. For example, according to a report published in the University of Manchester, 40% of food in the world is squandered. Secondly, the population of the world has also escalated dramatically, whereas, the production of the food has not increased accordingly. For instance, the Food and Agricultural Organization of the United Nations (FAO) forecasts that global food production will need to increase by 70% if the population reaches 9. 1bn by 2050. Thus, these problems result in the shortage of food irrespective of the improvement made in agriculture. In order to mitigate these issues, the government should start a campaign on how to quantify and characterise major food waste streams and manage population growth. By gaining awareness of public policy issues that impact society and making change happen through the formation of public policy, professionals in the field of nutrition can improve the health and well-being of the nation. To illustrate this, a research conducted at the University of Alberta showed that 60% of customers in the restaurants have minimized the food wastage after attending the public awareness programs. Therefore, the government can play a major role in helping to eliminate this problem. To conclude, although agricultural industry makes progress day by day, people are still deprived of basic necessities such as food. The major reasons behind this issue are wastage of food and rapid growth in population. It has been discussed in this essay how these problems can be solved by arranging public awareness raising campaigns.
Despite the development made in the field of agriculture,
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many
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people
suffer starvation all over the world. This essay will discuss two
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problems
responsible for this deprivation of
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food
; corruption and
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population
growth. The solutions to these
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problems
can be diminishing
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food
wastage and taking measures to control
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population
that would
be highlighted
in this essay.

One of the reasons of
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people
suffering from extreme hunger can be excessive production of
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food
at the restaurants, which is
also
a kind of corruption. This is
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because
of the poor
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food
management system.
For example
, according to a report published in the University of Manchester, 40% of
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food
in the world
is squandered
.
Secondly
, the
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population
of the world has
also
escalated
dramatically
, whereas, the production of the
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food
has not increased
accordingly
.
For instance
, the
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Food
and Agricultural Organization of the United Nations (FAO) forecasts that global
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food
production will need to increase by 70% if the
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population
reaches 9. 1bn by 2050.
Thus
, these
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problems
result in the shortage of
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food
irrespective of the improvement made in agriculture.

In order to mitigate these issues, the
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government
should
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start
a campaign on how to quantify and
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characterise
major
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food
waste streams and manage
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population
growth. By gaining awareness of
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public
policy issues that impact society and making
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change
happen through the formation of
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public
policy, professionals in the field of nutrition can
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improve
the health and well-being of the nation. To illustrate this,
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a research
conducted at the University of Alberta
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showed
that 60% of customers in the restaurants have minimized the
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food
wastage after attending the
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public
awareness programs.
Therefore
, the
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government
can play a major role in helping to eliminate this problem.

To conclude
, although agricultural industry
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makes
progress day by day,
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people
are
still
deprived of
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basic necessities
such as
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food
. The major reasons behind this issue are wastage of
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food
and rapid growth in
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population
. It has
been discussed
in this essay how these
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problems
can
be solved
by arranging
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
awareness raising campaigns.
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IELTS essay It is often said that the only way to access good study programs is to move to a large city. or do you think location is less relevant these days. Use reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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