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Nowadays communication technologies have developed. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

Nowadays communication technologies have developed. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages? R0KPP
Since the communication technology and transportation have developed recently, majority of people have opportunity to work and live anywhere in the world for the time being. This essay will argue why this tendency is entirely positive despite some unfavourable aspects. On the one hand, development of communication technology and types of transports offer variety of bad aspects. The main downside of this development is that they are detrimental for humans health. Individuals are used to living in sedentary lifestyle. This can be exemplified by the fact that the number of people who are suffering from obesity are incredibly raising. Another negative point of this issue is that it leads to both air and land pollution. In urban areas the quality of air are becoming poor due to plethora of vehicles. For instance in our country, especially in the cities, the quantity of fresh air are declining than in the past. On the other hand, there is several upsides of technology and transportation development. First of all, it gives us a chance to communicate instantly with other people who live abroad. In other words, we can share our photos and videos to our remote friends in a matter of seconds by pressing a button. Secondly, people can educate online by the means of developed technologies. In fact, we may learn and search everything on the internet sitting at home. It, consequently, helps us to save our time as well as money. Taking everything into account, I would state that developing communication technologies and transports have certain disadvantages including obesity and pollution. However, advantages such as instant communication and distant learning definetely outweigh all undesirably factors.
Since the
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communication
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technology
and transportation have developed recently,
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majority of
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people
have opportunity to work and
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live
anywhere in the world for the time being. This essay will argue why this tendency is
entirely
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positive
despite
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some
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unfavourable
aspects.

On the one hand, development of
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communication
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technology
and types of transports offer variety of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
aspects. The main downside of this development is that they are detrimental for humans health. Individuals are
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used
to living in sedentary lifestyle. This can
be exemplified
by the fact that the number of
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people
who are suffering from obesity are
incredibly
raising. Another
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negative
point of this issue is that it leads to both air and land pollution. In urban areas the quality of air are becoming poor due to plethora of vehicles.
For instance
in our country,
especially
in the cities, the quantity of fresh air are declining than in the past.

On the other hand
, there is several upsides of
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technology
and transportation development.
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First of all
, it gives us a chance to communicate
instantly
with other
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people
who
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live
abroad.
In other words
, we can share our photos and videos to our remote friends in a matter of seconds by pressing a button.
Secondly
,
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people
can educate online by the means of developed
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technologies
. In fact, we may learn and search everything on the internet sitting at home. It,
consequently
,
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helps
us to save our time
as well
as money.

Taking everything into account, I would state that developing
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communication
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technologies
and transports have certain disadvantages including obesity and pollution.
However
, advantages such as instant
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communication
and distant learning
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definetely
outweigh all
undesirably
factors.
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IELTS essay Nowadays communication technologies have developed. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
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