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Nowadays children spend a lot of time to watch TV program and playing computer games some people believe however that it doesn't help to develop a mental ability skill to what extent do you agree or disagree

Nowadays children spend a lot of time to watch TV program and playing computer games some people believe however that it doesn't help to develop a mental ability skill m3lor

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