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Nowadays children are face more pressure from academic,commercial and social perpesctives.what are the causes and solutions .

Nowadays children are face more pressure from academic, commercial and social perpesctives. what are the causes and solutions. 6xBOr
In this modern world, it is commonly said that children are pressurized and are facing harder academic, social and commercial challenges. This essay discusses the causes of this issue and suggest some measures to alleviate the problem. To begin with, there are plethora of academic stress on student. First and foremost, their competition is not with the children sitting next to them or in the next class. It is at national and international levels. Parents have high expectations in their child. They want them to excel in every field. So, they provide all the necessary facilities required. Interesting fact is that, school bag is heavier than student bag himself. Another problem needs to be considered is that, after the school time they have to go to private coaching too. As a result, they does not get enough time for relaxing. For instance, it should be noted that the recent studies by the Times of India shows that 60% of students are under depression due to lack of free time. There are also social and commercial pressures. Socially, the children of today are in a huge dilemma. They want to adopt the global culture, whereas parents force them to confine themselves to the traditions. Due to the fact that, this affects their family relationship. In addition to this the commercial pressure have major impact on mind's of today's children. For example, a child will undoubtedly want a mobile phone that is as good or better than friends. However, there are some possible solutions for tackle this problem. Parents should have realistic expectations from their child. And most importantly they should spend adequate time with their children. They should in fact make a student learn how to win with modesty and lose with grace. Both parents and schools should learn and allow children to bloom by bringing out their hidden talent. It in turn will make a child grow physically and psychologically. To recapitulate above aforementioned points, there is no doubt that children of today are facing lot of pressures, but various steps should be taken to protect life of children. Otherwise, these pressures affects psychological and physiological growth of child.
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some
measures to alleviate the problem.

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begin
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stress
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student
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children
sitting
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next
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class
. It is at national and international levels.
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Parents
have high expectations in their
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child
. They want them to excel in every field.
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So
, they provide all the necessary facilities required. Interesting fact is that, school bag is heavier than
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student
bag himself. Another problem needs to
be considered
is that, after the school
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time
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have to
go to private coaching too.
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Times
of India
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shows
that 60% of
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students
are under depression due to lack of free time.

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social and commercial
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pressures
.
Socially
, the
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children
of
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today
are in a huge dilemma. They want to adopt the global culture, whereas
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parents
force them to confine themselves to the traditions. Due to the fact that, this affects their family relationship.
In addition
to this the commercial
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pressure
have major impact on mind's of
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today
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children
.
For example
, a
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child
will
undoubtedly
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as
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good
or better than friends.

However
, there are
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some
possible solutions for tackle this problem.
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Parents
should have realistic expectations from their
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child
. And most
importantly
they should spend adequate
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time
with their
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children
. They should in fact
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student
learn how to win with modesty and lose with grace. Both
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parents
and schools should learn and
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allow
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children
to bloom by bringing out their hidden talent. It in turn will
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make
a
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child
grow
physically
and
psychologically
.

To recapitulate above aforementioned points, there is no doubt that
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children
of
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today
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lot of
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pressures
,
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various steps should
be taken
to protect life of
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children
.
Otherwise
, these
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pressures
affects psychological and physiological growth of
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child
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays children are face more pressure from academic, commercial and social perpesctives. what are the causes and solutions.

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  American English
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359 words
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