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Now a lot of people in college are doing academic study. We should encourage them to learn vocational skills( like plumber and electrician ). Do you agree or disagree. v.1

Now a lot of people in college are doing academic study. We should encourage them to learn vocational skills( like plumber and electrician ). v. 1
It is an undeniable fact that the technical skills are beneficial for the people. These days, educational institutions must provide practice skills to their students with their curriculum studies. However, I completely agree with the given statement and the reasons for it will be elaborated in the enlisted paragraphs. From my practical point of view, the first and foremost reason for this, is that people can solve the problem at time of emergency. In other words, if individuals have adequate information about vocational training they could immediately fix the problem, which can save their cost and resources. Besides this, masses do not have do depend on technician For instance, at the time of tap leakage a person can repairs it with ease, which could reduce their anxiety and worry about the problem. Secondly, people become self-reliant. This is because there are many situations in a life when individuals have to travel to other places for higher education or for job opportunities, so that time they do not have to depends on others. With the assist of practice skills a person can cook their food and wash their clothes easily, which is useful for their basic survival. Thus, in the urgency practical knowledge is useful, and it also curtails dependency on other people. Finally, vocational education creats outstanding curriculum vitae at the time of interview. To explain further, students who have extra knowledge about myriads skills another than education that helps them to get better job opportunities. The reason for this, companies require multi-tasking person in their place, who can solve the technical issues. According to the recent survey has been conducted by The Vocational Traning Center of Japan reveals that more than 63% of Japan's youths aquire compulsory have vocational education depicts impressive personality. Hence, technical skills help to crack interviews. In conclusion, it is truly said that the technical skills knowledge has paramount and it must be teach in teritary education. Nonetheless, I am in the favour of this policy, which help students for their sustainable development.
It is an undeniable fact that the
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technical
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skills
are beneficial for the
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people
. These days, educational institutions
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must
provide practice
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skills
to their students with their curriculum studies.
However
, I completely
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agree
with the
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given
statement and the reasons for it will
be elaborated
in the enlisted paragraphs.

From my practical point of view, the
first
and foremost reason for this, is that
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people
can solve the problem at
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time
of emergency. In
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other
words, if individuals have adequate information about vocational training they could immediately
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fix
the problem, which can save their cost and resources.
Besides
this, masses do not have
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do
depend on technician
For instance
, at the
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time
of tap leakage a person can
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repairs
it with
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ease
, which could
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reduce
their anxiety and worry about the problem.
Secondly
,
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people
become self-reliant. This is
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because
there are
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many
situations in a life when individuals
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have to
travel to
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other
places for higher
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education
or for job opportunities,
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so
that
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time
they do not
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have to
The verb after "to" should be in the base form: "depend".
depends
on others. With the assist of practice
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skills
a person can cook their food and wash their clothes
easily
, which is useful for their basic survival.
Thus
, in the urgency practical knowledge is useful, and it
also
curtails dependency on
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other
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people
.

Finally
, vocational
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education
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creats
outstanding curriculum vitae at the
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time
of interview. To
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explain
further
, students who have extra knowledge about myriads
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skills
another than
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education
that
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helps
them to
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get
better job opportunities. The reason for this,
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companies
require multi-tasking person in their place, who can solve the
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technical
issues. According to the recent survey has
been conducted
by The Vocational
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Traning
Center of Japan reveals that more than 63% of Japan's youths
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aquire
compulsory have vocational
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education
depicts impressive personality.
Hence
,
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technical
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skills
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help
to crack interviews.

In conclusion
, it is
truly
said that the
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technical
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skills
knowledge has paramount and it
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must
be
Consider using the past participle "taught"?
teach
in
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teritary
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education
. Nonetheless, I am in the
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favour
of this policy, which
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help
students for their sustainable development.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS essay Now a lot of people in college are doing academic study. We should encourage them to learn vocational skills( like plumber and electrician ). v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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