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Now-a-days people use social media to keep in touch with others and be aware of the news. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Now-a-days people use social media to keep in touch with others and be aware of the news. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Wyy5N
As the world has become a global village, social media connected the villagers living in. Presently, people utilise the services of social media platforms to stay connected with other and keep themselves updated of what is happening around. Emerging social media platforms resulted in easy connectivity and business networking whereas detrimental effects can be observed in tems of addicition of surfing and reduced in-person meetings. At on point of time, people use postal services or trunk calls to stay in touch with peers, acquaintences. This process suffered with delays, laches and loss of communication, which eventually led to the emergnce of social media. Social Media was previously used by army personnels and executives to convey messages quickly; however, this technology was soon introduced for general public which has revolutionarized the ease of connection. People make video calls, share messages to stay in touch with people who were with them back then. While images, videos are shared to share their experiences. Further, if anyone needs the services of a doctor, all they have to do is post a message publically that will connect them to the concerned person for buiness or personal interaction. Thereby, social media has offered ease of connection, and enhanced business and personal opportunities. On the other hand, continuous use of social media platforms has caused addiction in people. Social media platforms like facebook, instagram are designed to attract people and serves with content of their desire, due to which people can barely keep of off their phones for even a minute. In addition, people now avoid social gatherings, physical presence, because it is belived by them they keep seeing them all the time and neglect in-person meetings. Consequently, humans are turning home sick and lazy. In conclusion, social media has boosted the people’s connection and businesses which has resulted in greater gains. However, just because it made people unsocial and lazy, is not enough to put ban on such platforms. I believe that the benefits it concur should be kept in mind and disadvantaged could be worked of.
As the world has become a global village,
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connected the villagers living in.
Presently
,
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people
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utilise
the services of
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social
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media
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platforms
to stay connected with other and
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keep
themselves updated of what is happening around. Emerging
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social
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media
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platforms
resulted in easy connectivity and business networking whereas detrimental effects can
be observed
in
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tems
of
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addicition
of surfing and
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reduced
in-person meetings.

At on point of time,
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people
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use
postal services or trunk calls to stay in touch with peers,
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acquaintences
. This process suffered with delays,
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laches
and loss of communication, which
eventually
led to the
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emergnce
of
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social
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media
.
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Social
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Media
was previously
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used
by army
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personnels
and executives to convey messages
quickly
;
however
, this technology was
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soon
introduced for
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general public
which has
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revolutionarized
the
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ease
of connection.
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People
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make
video calls, share messages to stay in touch with
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people
who were with them back then. While images, videos
are shared
to share their experiences.
Further
, if anyone needs the services of a doctor, all they
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have to
do is post a message
publically
that will connect them to the concerned person for
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buiness
or personal interaction. Thereby,
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social
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media
has offered
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ease
of connection, and enhanced business and personal opportunities.

On the other hand
, continuous
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use
of
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social
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media
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platforms
has caused addiction in
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people
.
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Social
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media
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platforms
like
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facebook
,
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instagram
are designed
to attract
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people
and serves with content of their desire, due to which
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people
can
barely
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keep
of off their phones for even a minute.
In addition
,
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people
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now
avoid
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social
gatherings, physical presence,
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because
it is
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belived
by them they
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keep
seeing them all the time and neglect in-person meetings.
Consequently
, humans are turning home sick and lazy.

In conclusion
,
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social
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media
has boosted the
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people’s
connection and businesses which has resulted in greater gains.
However
,
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just
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because
it made
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people
unsocial and lazy, is not
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enough
to put ban on such
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platforms
. I believe that the benefits it
Did you mean "concurs"?
concur
should be
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kept
in mind and disadvantaged could
be worked
of.
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IELTS essay Now-a-days people use social media to keep in touch with others and be aware of the news. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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