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Now a day food has become easier to prepare. This change improved the way people live? Use reason and example to support your answer? v.3

Now a day food has become easier to prepare. This change improved the way people live? Use reason and example to support your answer? v. 3
it is a fact that, advancement of technology many household chores have become quite easy and enjoyable. They want to do it easily with the help of modern tools. According to me improvement is definitely enhance our lifestyle. In fact, it is more positive than disadvantages. Discussing the reason the most common one is that process of cooking become genderless and quicker. Also, as per a survey more men enjoy cooking in the recent year. This is because advance mordent tools. For example, microwave, oven, a food processor and coffee maker done half their work. Moreover, food is easy to prepared. people not only enjoy more cuisine than past but also Experiment their culinary skills. Furthermore, people get more time together with family and friends. Also pre-cooked, half-cooked and half-prepared food available. More home cooking is happening and less efforts are required, which is time saving. The mention reason have some impact too. However, easy food preparation is made people lazier and some health issues such as obesity, digestive problem and cancer. In addition, they using juice instead of fruit to intakes insufficient vitamins and minerals. which people cause many health problem. Thus, from the light of above discussion, it can be said that there are few negative impact on the way people live. I prefer to prepare tasty food in easy method using latest technology.
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it
is a fact that, advancement of technology
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many
household chores have become quite
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easy
and enjoyable. They want to do it
easily
with the
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help
of modern tools.
This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using "in my opinion" or "I think".
According to me
improvement is definitely
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enhance
our lifestyle. In fact, it is more
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positive
than disadvantages.

Discussing the reason the most common one is that process of cooking become genderless and quicker.
Also
, as per a survey more
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men
enjoy cooking in the recent year. This is
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because
advance
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mordent
tools.
For example
, microwave, oven, a
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food
processor and coffee maker done half their work.
Moreover
,
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food
is
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easy
to prepared.
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people
not
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only
enjoy more cuisine than past
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but
also
Experiment their culinary
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skills
.

Furthermore
,
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people
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get
more time together with family and friends.
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Also
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pre-cooked
, half-cooked and half-prepared
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food
available. More home cooking is happening and
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less
efforts
are required
, which is time saving.

The mention reason have
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some
impact too.
However
,
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easy
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food
preparation
is made
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people
lazier and
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some
health issues such as obesity, digestive problem and cancer.
In addition
,
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they using
juice
instead
of fruit to intakes insufficient vitamins and minerals.
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which
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people
cause
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many health
problem.

Thus
, from the light of above discussion, it can
be said
that there are few
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negative
impact on the way
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people
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live
. I prefer to prepare tasty
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food
in
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easy
method using
A determiner is probably missing here: "the latest".
latest
technology.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay Now a day food has become easier to prepare. This change improved the way people live? Use reason and example to support your answer? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
226 words
This writing has been penalized,
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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