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Novels, magazines and poetry are considered the three major forms of literature. Which one do you prefer? Explain why. v.1

Novels, magazines and poetry are considered the three major forms of literature. Which one do you prefer? Explain why. v. 1
In the modern era, people are living a lifestyle that has minimal activity. However, a significant increase can be seen in health clubs or gyms. Consequently, people face various physical and mental health issues due to lack of activity. The following paragraphs will draw upon the problems and also discuss the potential solutions. Firstly, one of the consequences people face due to sedentary lifestyle is because of a busy schedule, so they became more prone to obesity and other health-related issues. These include high blood pressure and stroke. Consuming pre-processed or cooked food adds on to this and they consequently have health issues at a young age. Secondly, as a result of a lazy lifestyle, the risk of developing mental health issues is high as Most individuals spend a considerable amount of time on technology at work or home. For instance, they are using computers or machines for household tasks. This further takes away the opportunity to interact or connect with others. Consequently, people today develop depression and anxiety issues, that might cross-impact in maintaining this unhealthy lifestyle. Moreover, this is becoming such a big challenge for health and well being and can be managed by adopting small changes in day to day life. Looking at the solution, it is important to plan activities that allow enough movement while working in offices or at home. For example, planning a walk around the block during breaks can help a person to have a change of scenery and allow some fresh air and sun. In addition to this, replacing pre-packed lunches with healthy fruits and salads can not only support healthy eating but also help to stay active. Another useful habit has time off without any technology to encourage people to connect with others. Planning a day with intentional reminders for moving or intermittent exercise can help as well. To conclude, an inactive way of living is the main reason that people have more health issues at a very young age. This can be modified by creating minor changes in daily life that may benefit from restoring health and well being.
In the modern era,
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people
are living a
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lifestyle
that has minimal activity.
However
, a significant increase can be
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seen
in
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health
clubs or gyms.
Consequently
,
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people
face various physical and mental
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health
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issues
due to lack of activity. The following paragraphs will draw upon the problems and
also
discuss the potential solutions.

Firstly
, one of the consequences
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people
face due to sedentary
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lifestyle
is
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because
of a busy schedule,
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so
they became more prone to obesity and other health-related
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issues
. These include high blood pressure and stroke. Consuming
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pre-processed
or cooked food
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adds
on to
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this and
they
consequently
have
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health
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issues
at a young age.
Secondly
,
as a result
of a lazy
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lifestyle
, the
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risk
of developing mental
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health
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issues
is high as Most individuals spend a considerable amount of time on technology at work or home.
For instance
, they are using computers or machines for household tasks. This
further
takes away the opportunity to interact or connect with others.
Consequently
,
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people
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today
develop depression and anxiety
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issues
, that might cross-impact in maintaining this unhealthy
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lifestyle
.
Moreover
, this is becoming such a
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big
challenge for
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health
and
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well being
and can
be managed
by adopting
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small
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changes
in day to day life.

Looking at the solution, it is
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important
to plan activities that
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allow
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enough
movement while working in offices or at home.
For example
, planning a walk around the block during breaks can
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help
a person to have a
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change
of scenery and
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allow
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some
fresh air and sun.
In addition
to this, replacing
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pre-packed
lunches with healthy fruits and salads can not
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only
support healthy eating
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but
also
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help
to stay active. Another useful habit has time off without any technology to encourage
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people
to connect with others. Planning a day with intentional reminders for moving or intermittent exercise can
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help
as well
.

To conclude
, an inactive way of living is the main reason that
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people
have more
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health
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issues
at a
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very
young age. This can
be modified
by creating minor
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changes
in daily life that may benefit from restoring
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health
and
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well being
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Novels, magazines and poetry are considered the three major forms of literature. Which one do you prefer? Explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
349 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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