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NOTEFULL Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

NOTEFULL Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
Technology has a significant effect on our lives. We find technology everywhere and cannot avoid its influence. One very important technology is computers. Some people believe that they have made life easier and more convenient while others disagree. In my view, computers have created a better quality of life for many reasons. The first reason is that computers have improved the quality of many other products. Companies use computers to build products that work more efficiently and effectively. For example, today, most cars possess small computers that help improve their safety and therefore, improve their quality. My car has a small computer that can determine if the car is out of control. If it is, the computer will take action and alter the speed of the tires so that it will regain control. Cars represent just one example of how computers have positively impacted our lives. The second reason is that computers provide a way for us to get important information. Through the Internet, the personal computer has become one of the most popular and convenient sources of important information. For example, a friend of mine felt really sick a few months ago. She had a bad stomachache and it was late at night. I didn’t have access to a doctor, so I researched information on how to help soothe a bad stomach online. I found that soft foods such as rice could help. With this information, I was able to help my friend feel better. This experience taught me that computers can help us significantly. In sum, computers benefit our lives by making it easier and more convenient. Not only have they improved so many things that we use everyday, but they also give us a simple way to gather important information quickly. Computers have revolutionized our lives and we should all support their continued development and use.
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technology is computers.
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believe that they have made life easier and more convenient while others disagree. In my view, computers have created a better quality of life for
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Companies
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computers to build products that work more
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today
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computers that
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help
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their safety and
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their quality. My
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computer that can determine if the
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is out of control. If it is, the computer will take action and alter the speed of the tires
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that it will regain control.
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one example of how computers have
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impacted our
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information
. Through the Internet, the personal computer has become one of the most popular and convenient sources of
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important
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information
.
For example
, a friend of mine felt
really
sick a few months ago. She had a
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bad
stomachache and it was late at night. I didn’t have access to a doctor,
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so
I researched
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information
on how to
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help
soothe a
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bad
stomach online. I found that soft foods such as rice could
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help
. With this
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information
, I was able to
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help
my friend feel better. This experience taught me that computers can
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help
us
significantly
.

In sum, computers benefit our
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lives
by making it easier and more convenient. Not
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give us a simple way to gather
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quickly
. Computers have revolutionized our
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lives and
we should all support their continued development and
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IELTS essay NOTEFULL Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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