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nfluence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio-diversity? What solutions can you suggest? v.1

nfluence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio-diversity? What solutions can you suggest? v. 1
It is sometimes thought that the most efficient way to run a business is within the family. Family members who are running a business together will work harder and be more dedicated, but there are also drawbacks to be taken into account. Firstly, one evident benefit of a family running a business together is directors or managers who are family members can work harder and be more dedicated. To put it another way, when a group of relatives works in their own company, they will make sure this company to be a leading company in their fields and make a considerable profit every year, unlike other employees. Secondly, a family run business would be advantageous because family members trust each other, and work schedules can be adjusted and cover easily found. Therefore, decisions can be made that benefit the entire family. Thirdly, family members have a shorter learning curve because they have grown up with the business. This will result in reducing the rate of errors in the business, and this also will facilitate communication between staff. Moreover, the work atmosphere will be relaxed. On the other hand, one problem of a family run business is that there might be a bias toward promoting family members ahead of non-related staff. This means that non-family employees will find it difficult to integrate with the job and remain loyal to the company. For instance, if an employee who is working hard to increase a company’s sales, but he noticed that one of his boss’s family got a promotion instead of him. This will have more negative consequences on the company in the long run. Another possible issue is that family members might not have the required skills to be successful managers or directors, resulting in mediocre business performance. Losing the right skills to run business means that ideas will become stale and fresh perspectives might be difficult to find. Furthermore, business disputes lead to family conflicts because issues become more subjective rather than objective. The unbalance in decision making is due to not all family members have the same aims for the company. In conclusion, although a family run business can bring about more benefits to the company, it can lead to family conflicts and poor business performance. Also, non-related staff will lose their loyalty because of bias promotions toward family members.
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.
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together will
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harder and be more dedicated,
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into account.

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running a
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business
together is directors or managers who are
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family
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members
can
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work
harder and be more dedicated. To put it another way, when a group of relatives works in their
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own
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company
, they will
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make
sure this
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company
to be a leading
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company
in their fields and
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make
a considerable profit every year, unlike other employees.
Secondly
, a
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family
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run
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business
would be advantageous
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because
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family
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members
trust each other, and
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work
schedules can
be adjusted
and cover
easily
found.
Therefore
, decisions can
be made
that benefit the entire
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family
.
Thirdly
,
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family
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members
have a shorter learning curve
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because
they have grown up with the
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business
. This will result in reducing the rate of errors in the
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business
, and this
also
will facilitate communication between staff.
Moreover
, the
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work
atmosphere will
be relaxed
.

On the other hand
, one problem of a
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family
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run
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business
is that there might be a bias toward promoting
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family
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members
ahead of non-related staff. This means that non-family employees will find it difficult to integrate with the job and remain loyal to the
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company
.
For instance
, if an employee who is working
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hard
to increase a
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company’s
sales,
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but
he noticed that one of his boss’s
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family
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got
a promotion
instead
of him. This will have more
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negative
consequences on the
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company
in the long
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run
. Another possible issue is that
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family
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members
might not have the required
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skills
to be successful managers or directors, resulting in mediocre
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business
performance. Losing the right
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skills
to
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run
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business
means that
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ideas
will become stale and fresh perspectives might be difficult to find.
Furthermore
,
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business
disputes lead to
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family
conflicts
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because
issues become more subjective
rather
than objective. The unbalance in
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decision making
is due to not all
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family
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members
have the same aims for the
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company
.

In conclusion
, although a
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family
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run
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business
can bring about more benefits to the
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company
, it can lead to
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family
conflicts and poor
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business
performance.
Also
, non-related staff will lose their loyalty
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because
of bias promotions toward
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family
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members
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay nfluence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio-diversity? What solutions can you suggest? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
390 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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