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Tpo 16 Do you agree or disagree with the statement The best way to travel is in a group led by tour guide v.1

Tpo 16 The best way to travel is in a group led by tour guide v. 1
Nowadays, it seems that families tend to eat together less frequently. This essay will put forward some explanations for this trend and an analysis of the potential impacts. The fact that family members choose not to eat with each other can be attributable to two reasons. Firstly, since people these days tend to have heavier workloads and more hectic schedules than in the past, sitting down to share a meal with their family members might not be a convenient choice. Instead, these individuals usually eat out with their friends, colleagues or business partners near their workplace which can be more suitable for their timetable. Secondly, the fast food culture of modern life can change people’s eating habits because fast food can be found everywhere and is usually an inexpensive food choice. For instance, young people in Vietnam often grab a quick meal after a busy day at work or school, which leads them to skipping meals with their family when they go home. The trend has both positive and negative impacts on people. In terms of the benefits, people are able to be much more flexible with their time. They will not have to show up at a fixed hour to have meals with their family and can eat whatever and whenever they want. However, in terms of the negative effects, this can lead to a weaker family bond. If a family continuously eats separately, family members may not be able to share their thoughts, feelings with each other, and therefore may feel isolated from each other. This will result in a lack of deep family connection. In conclusion, the tendency of family members eating separately is mainly caused by the difference in their schedules or the preference to eat fast food, which can have both positive and negative impacts.
Nowadays, it seems that
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families
tend to
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eat
together less
frequently
. This essay will put forward
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some
explanations for this trend and an analysis of the potential impacts.

The fact that
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family
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members
choose not to
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eat
with each other can be attributable to two reasons.
Firstly
, since
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people
these days tend to have heavier workloads and more hectic schedules than in the past, sitting down to share a
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meal
with their
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family
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members
might not be a convenient choice.
Instead
, these individuals
usually
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eat
out with their friends, colleagues or business partners near their workplace which can be more suitable for their timetable.
Secondly
, the
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fast
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food
culture of modern life can
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change
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people’s
eating habits
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because
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fast
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food
can
be found
everywhere and is
usually
an inexpensive
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food
choice.
For instance
, young
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people
in Vietnam
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often
grab a quick
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meal
after a busy day at work or school, which leads them to skipping
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meals
with their
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family
when they go home.

The trend has both
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positive
and
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negative
impacts on
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people
. In terms of the benefits,
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people
are able to be much more flexible with their time. They will not
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have to
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show
up at a
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fixed
hour to have
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meals
with their
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family
and can
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eat
whatever and whenever they want.
However
, in terms of the
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negative
effects, this can lead to a weaker
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family
bond. If a
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family
continuously
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eats
separately
,
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family
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members
may not be able to share their thoughts, feelings with each other, and
therefore
may feel isolated from each other. This will result in a lack of deep
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family
connection.

In conclusion
, the tendency of
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family
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members
eating
separately
is
mainly
caused by the difference in their schedules or the preference to
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eat
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fast
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food
, which can have both
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positive
and
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negative
impacts.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Tpo 16 The best way to travel is in a group led by tour guide v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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