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News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? v.30

News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? v. 30
News agencies utilise diagrams and photographs quite regularly for narrating the story. While these images help to understand the reports better, some stories only require elaborate descriptions for avoiding any sort of confusion. This essay will discuss why incorporating images in reports are effective in most of the cases, but why it is better to avoid in some of the exceptional scenarios. Pictorial representation of an event or a description is easy to grasp. Because of this, people, irrespective of age, and language barrier, could understand the core content in the message. Moreover, this practice has not just helped the viewers and the readers but also the news organisations to attract more followers who are only interested in knowing the high level information. To exemplify, number of units of the Times of India newspapers sold per day have been increased by 10 times since 2005, after they decided to include at least one image in each of the articles. Admittedly, relying heavily on pictures for explaining the news has proven to be very efficient in recent years. However, not always, adding photos would create a sensible report. Some information needs to be explained in a detailed manner without adding any pics in order to avoid confusions. For example, events such as, bilateral meeting between 2 foreign ministers to discuss about military and financial strategy, or a CEO of the company addressing their employees, should be explained clearly to the viewers by giving enough details in words. A simple picture in cases such as this would not be sufficient to make end users understand. Instead, people might get confused with the similar kind of events which was held prior to the image depicted in the report. Obviously, an image in a report should not induce uncertainty. To conclude, pictures are helpful to interpret most of the information. But, in my opinion, sometimes, these causes doubt in the users' mind. Thus, it is very essential that pictorial representations are added only if it enhances people's understandability and clarity on the topic.
News agencies
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utilise
diagrams and photographs quite
regularly
for narrating the story. While these
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images
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help
to understand the
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reports
better,
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some
stories
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only
require elaborate descriptions for avoiding any sort of confusion. This essay will discuss why incorporating
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images
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reports
are effective in most of the cases,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
why it is better to avoid in
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some of the
exceptional scenarios.

Pictorial representation of an
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event
or a description is easy to grasp.
Because of this
,
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people
, irrespective of age, and language barrier, could understand the core content in the message.
Moreover
, this practice has not
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just
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helped
the viewers and the readers
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but
also
the news
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organisations
to attract more followers who are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
interested in knowing the high level information. To exemplify, number of units of
If the term is a proper noun, use the suggested capitalization.
the Times of India
newspapers sold per day have
been increased
by 10 times since 2005, after they decided to include at least one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
image
in each of the articles.
Admittedly
, relying
heavily
on pictures for explaining the news has proven to be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
efficient in recent years.

However
, not always, adding photos would create a sensible
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
report
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
information needs to be
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explained
Consider replacing "in a detailed manner" with the adverb for "detailed"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a detailed manner
without adding any pics in order to avoid confusions.
For example
,
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events
such as, bilateral meeting between 2 foreign ministers to
Did you mean simply "discuss military"? You do not need the word "about" here.
discuss about military
and financial strategy, or a CEO of the
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company
addressing their employees, should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explained
clearly
to the viewers by giving
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enough
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details
in words. A simple picture in cases such as this would not be sufficient to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
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end
users understand.
Instead
,
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people
might
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get
confused with the similar kind of
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events
which
was held
prior to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
image
depicted in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
report
.
Obviously
, an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
image
in a
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report
should not induce uncertainty.

To conclude
, pictures are helpful to interpret most of the information.
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But
, in my opinion,
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sometimes
, these causes doubt in the users' mind.
Thus
, it is
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very
essential that pictorial representations are
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added
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only
if it enhances
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people
's understandability and clarity on the topic.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? v. 30

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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