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News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? v.25

News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? v. 25
Nowadays pictures accompany news stories on TV and in the newspapers very often. Some people believe that these pictures are more effective than words. I completely agree with this statement. Firstly, the pictures makes the news more memorable. For example details of accidents provided by pictorial illustrations make the audience more clear about the faults that has occurred and led to fatalities. This is because images are easy to draw attention and are retained by people for a longer time. Moreover, this will lead to more social awareness among public and can prevent future similar news to happen again. As a consequence, people will try to avoid having accidents with the prevention of similar mistakes. Secondly, due to pictures the people get clear conveying news. For instance, for every health program sponsored by the government of India there is a symbol and emblem which is correlates the cause and message to common people. This helps with sharing with them and accept the social perception easily. This has led to success of pregnant women and baby health program and tuberculosis (TB) health program widely. Consequently, the awareness among illiterates who are unable to read can be increased by visual descriptions. Thus, it favours each strata of society (poor or rich) by spreading message of welfare and well being. To conclude, I would concede that pictures are more impactful. As these leads to more remembrance and clear conveyance to public even to illiterates. Overall, I am convinced that images are more important than only news.
Nowadays
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pictures
accompany
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news
stories on TV and in the newspapers
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often
.
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Some
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believe that these
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pictures
are more effective than words. I completely
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agree
with this statement.

Firstly
, the
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pictures
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makes
the
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news
more memorable.
For example
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details
of accidents provided by pictorial illustrations
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make
the audience more
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clear
about the faults that has occurred and led to fatalities. This is
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because
images are easy to draw attention and
are retained
by
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people
for a longer time.
Moreover
, this will lead to more social awareness among public and can
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prevent
future similar
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news
to happen again. As a consequence,
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people
will try to avoid having accidents with the prevention of similar mistakes.

Secondly
, due to
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pictures
the
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people
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get
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clear
conveying
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news
.
For instance
, for every health program sponsored by the
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government
of India there is a symbol and emblem which is correlates the cause and message to common
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people
. This
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helps
with sharing with them and accept the social perception
easily
. This has led to success of pregnant women and baby health program and tuberculosis (TB) health program
widely
.
Consequently
, the awareness among illiterates who are unable to read can
be increased
by visual descriptions.
Thus
, it
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favours
each
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strata
of society (poor or rich) by spreading message of welfare and
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well being
.

To conclude
, I would concede that
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pictures
are more impactful. As these leads to more remembrance and
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clear
conveyance to public even to illiterates.
Overall
, I
am convinced
that images are more
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important
than
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only
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news
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? v. 25

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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