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News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? v.16

Breaking news is represented by photos in virtual and journal frequently and individuals deem that this is more fruitful rather than written. This essay agrees that it is a very impressive means to symbolize current updates. Relevant points will be substantiated in the upcoming paragraphs. To begin with, images have has become an important part of media which helps to get people’s attention quickly. Nowadays, journalists use photos tofor makemaking their his/her presentation attractive and interesting. For example, everyone reads the a Toronto Sun on a dailyon daily basis and they can see a couple of pictures on the very first page which catches their eyer your eye towards that particular thing. Secondly, people get better understanding about current affairs due to pictures. Images describe almost everything with proper information. To illustrate, a business building caught got fire in Toronto due to an electricto electric short circuit two years ago and journalist explained everything via photos like where did the fire start from, what was the damage and how firefighters saved victims. Thirdly, images put people in reality as photos provide good comprehension. When people see any photos of any issues they believe that this is a reality. For instance, as we mentioned in the above example of the fire incident after seeing this accident people are not going against it as it shows reality to the public. Additionally, it becomes a cup of tea to remember things when humans see photos or reality as everybody still hashave that fire incident in their mind that happened in 2018 due to pictures which give reality. To conclude, the above discussion makes it evident that images are performing a vital role in a media as it gives attention, good perception, reality and easy way to recall things.
Breaking news
is represented
by
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photos
in virtual and journal
frequently
and individuals deem that this is more fruitful
rather
than written. This essay
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agrees
that it is a
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very
impressive means to symbolize
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current
updates. Relevant points will
be substantiated
in the upcoming paragraphs.

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begin
with,
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images
have has become an
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important
part of media which
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helps
to
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get
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people’s
attention
quickly
. Nowadays, journalists
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use
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photos
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tofor
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makemaking
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their
his/her presentation attractive and interesting.
For example
, everyone reads
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the a
Toronto Sun on a
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dailyon
daily
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basis and
they can
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see
a couple of pictures on the
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very
first
page which catches their
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eyer
your eye towards that particular thing.
Secondly
,
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people
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get
better understanding about
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current
affairs due to pictures.
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Images
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describe
almost everything with proper information. To illustrate, a business building caught
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got
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fire
in Toronto due to an
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electricto
electric short circuit two years ago and journalist
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explained
everything via
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photos
like where did the
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fire
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start
from, what was the damage and how firefighters saved victims.

Thirdly
,
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images
put
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people
in
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reality
as
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photos
provide
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good
comprehension.
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When
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people
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see
any
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photos
of any issues they believe that this is a
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reality
.
For instance
, as we mentioned in the above example of the
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fire
incident after seeing this accident
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people
are not going against it as it
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shows
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reality
to the public.
Additionally
, it becomes a cup of tea to remember things when humans
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see
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photos
or
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reality
as everybody
still
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hashave
that
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fire
incident in their mind that happened in 2018 due to pictures which give reality.

To conclude
, the above discussion
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makes
it evident that
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images
are performing a vital role in a media as it gives attention,
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good
perception,
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reality
and easy way to recall things.
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IELTS essay News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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