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News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? v.14

News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? v. 14
It is important to note that stories from the news media are regularly being relayed with images. This essay agrees that these photos are more efficient that words. To begin with, one reason why the essay is in agreement is that photographs provide a real picture of a story. People are likely to believe a report if it is followed by graphic illustration. For instance, The New York Times recently reported that 90% of the people will believe a news report when it is published with photographs than when it is not. Furthermore, people have more interest in reading newspapers that are accompanied by images. They considered reading words only as boring. For example, The Sunday Times recently reported that more than 90% of people would prefer to read news with graphics to show that it is real compared to when they are not. Moreover stories that are aided with photos will prove to be true. There are a lot of fake reports all over the places. To illustrate this, a recent survey by the Delta State Ministry of Information found that 90% of the reports by media outlets depicted in photographs tend to be real. In contrast, if the survey had not shown these trends, then stories reported with graphics are not true. In conclusion, due to the important role pictures plays in displaying information as it makes it to be real, I believe that it is more effective than words.
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to note that
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stories
from the
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news
media are
regularly
being relayed
with images. This essay
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agrees
that these photos are more efficient that words.

To
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begin
with, one reason why the essay is in agreement is that photographs provide a
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real
picture of a
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story
.
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People
are likely to believe a
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report
if it
is followed
by graphic illustration.
For instance
, The
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New
York Times recently reported that 90% of the
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people
will believe a
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news
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report
when it
is published
with photographs than when it is not.

Furthermore
,
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people
have more interest in reading newspapers that
are accompanied
by images. They considered reading words
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only
as boring.
For example
, The Sunday Times recently reported that more than 90% of
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people
would prefer to read
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news
with graphics to
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show
that it is
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real
compared to when they are not.
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Moreover
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stories
that
are aided
with photos will prove to be true. There are
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a lot of
fake
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reports
all over the places. To illustrate this, a recent survey by the Delta State Ministry of Information found that 90% of the
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reports
by media outlets depicted in photographs tend to be
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real
.
In contrast
, if the survey had not shown these trends, then
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stories
reported with graphics are not true.

In conclusion
, due to the
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important
role pictures plays in displaying information as it
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makes
it to be
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real
, I believe that it is more effective than words.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
242 words
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6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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