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Some people view teenager conflicts with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whist others see it something negative which should be avoided. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people view teenager conflicts with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whist others see it something negative which should be avoided. v. 1
There is no doubt that adolescence can be a difficult period for both youngsters and their parents. Although some people believe that conflict at this time does more harm than good, I would argue that it is an essential stage of teenagers’ development. On the one hand, those who believe teenage conflict is harmful might argue that it can damage relationships between parents and their children. This is because such disputes can create tension in the family. For example, it is quite common for young people to begin smoking at their age to impress their peers, but the resulting confrontations with parents can lead to difficulties with communication afterwards. In contrast, if there is no conflict between parents and teenagers, there will be much greater sense of happiness among family members. On the other hand, my view is that this conflict is important because it can help teenagers to mature. The reason for this is that by having disagreements adolescents can form and develop their own opinion. For instance, a child may grow up in a family of meat-eaters but fell very strongly about not eating meat. If this child does not voice their opinion, they will be going against their principles. However, if they are willing to engage in conflict with their parents, their conscience will be much clearer despite the agony of the argument. In conclusion, despite the danger of damaging relationships which teenager conflict cab create, it is my firm belief that this time of friction is a vital step o the path to teenagers becoming and independently-minded adults.
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parents
. Although
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some
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people
believe that
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conflict
at this time does more harm than
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good
, I would argue that it is an essential stage of
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teenagers’
development.

On the one hand, those who believe teenage
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conflict
is harmful might argue that it can damage relationships between
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parents
and their children. This is
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because
such disputes can create tension in the family.
For example
, it is quite common for young
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people
to
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begin
smoking at their age to impress their peers,
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but
the resulting confrontations with
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parents
can lead to difficulties with communication afterwards.
In contrast
, if there is no
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conflict
between
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parents
and
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teenagers
, there will be much greater sense of happiness among family members.

On the other hand
, my view is that this
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conflict
is
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important
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because
it can
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help
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teenagers
to mature.
The reason for this is
that by having disagreements adolescents can form and develop their
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own
opinion.
For instance
, a child may grow up in a family of meat-eaters
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but
fell
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very
strongly
about not eating meat. If this child does not voice their opinion, they will be going against their principles.
However
, if they are willing to engage in
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conflict
with their
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parents
, their conscience will be much clearer despite the agony of the argument.

In conclusion
, despite the
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danger
of damaging relationships which
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teenager
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conflict
cab create, it is my firm belief that this time of friction is a vital step o the path to
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teenagers
becoming and
independently
-minded adults.
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16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people view teenager conflicts with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whist others see it something negative which should be avoided. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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