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News Stories on TV and in newspaper are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? v.1

News Stories on TV and in newspaper are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? v. 1
Television and Newspapers would be considered as a source of the news. While some people think that news will published become more effective with the use of relevant photographs. In my opinion, I support this view as it gets attention and easy to understand. To begin with, one of the important points is that the news that printed in the newspaper, with the photograph of the certain event can attract the people. In addition, to that person can also get basic information from the image, so this type of the news saves a person time, as there is especially no need to read the words. For example, the news related to the accident between the car and truck easily understand by showing the photo, so there is no need to read it further. Thus, facts represented in this way, becomes easily accessible for everyone. Secondly, the news that covers the information about the politicians or celebrities, then it would be represented with their photo makes person known to everyone. For instance, the news that contains information about the criminals if news channels show the photograph, then if anyone can see them; they would inform the police about their location using, that criminals would be possible to catch. Lastly, If someone wants to promote any new buildings, then it would be better to publish it with the photo. In conclusion, while the news that represented with the pictures can be easily recognized, even one can achieve the publicity. It is a way which helps the government and an individual, So the government should promote this type of activity.
Television and Newspapers would
be considered
as a source of the
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news
.
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some
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people
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think
that
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news
will
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published
become more effective with the
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use
of relevant photographs. In my opinion, I support this view as it
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gets
attention and easy to understand.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, one of the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
points is that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
that printed in the newspaper, with the photograph of the certain
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
can attract the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
In addition
, to that person can
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
basic information from the image,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
this type of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
saves a person time, as there is
especially
no need to read the words.
For example
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
related to the accident between the car and truck
easily
understand by showing the photo,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
there is no need to read it
further
.
Thus
, facts represented in this way, becomes
easily
accessible for everyone.

Secondly
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
that covers the information about the politicians or celebrities, then it would
be represented
with their photo
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
person known to everyone.
For instance
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
that contains information about the criminals if
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
channels
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
the photograph, then if anyone can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
them; they would inform the police about their location using, that criminals would be possible to catch.
Lastly
, If someone wants to promote any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
buildings, then it would be better to publish it with the photo.

In conclusion
, while the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
that represented with the pictures can be
easily
recognized, even one can achieve the publicity. It is a way which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and an individual,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should promote this type of activity.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay News Stories on TV and in newspaper are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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