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News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? v.5

News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? v. 5
All people know about television and newspaper are the best way to get new information and knowledge. Revisers can establish how to announce on TV and to publish in newspapers, in some cases there are several immoral effects to their resolutions. In current days, bad announcement gets more viewer than good announcement because of people’s interest and way of presentation. In my opinion, there is some causes which affects rewriters’ agreement and they should present only favorable information to population. Visibly, editors can publish everything which is they want in newspapers and announce on TV, there are various bad impacts for these situation. Nowadays, they try to present which news gains a lot of popularity, especially bad reports are admired by people and these can attract a lot of people around the world. For instance, if revisers print about up-to-date people’s personal lives such as actors, politicians and sportsmen, they can addict lots of people to these kinds of announcements. After that they make a lot of money from advertisements like this. On the other hand, more people would rather to know or to search bad information than good ones because people are interested in bad news, so editors also print more harmful announcements than simple or not attractive news. In my view, news companies should present more good information than bad ones. For instance, BBC editors or other companies should inform valuable news, after that it helps to improve the thinking of individual and national development. Thus, it is right of the editor to present only that news which is true and real. To conclude, public interest, choice, profit and publicity there is the main factor which influences the editor for the time of broadcasting. I do believe it is significant that we should change the unreal advertisements to the real ones for improving our thinking.
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and knowledge. Revisers can establish how to announce on TV and to publish in newspapers, in
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cases there are several immoral effects to their resolutions. In
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days,
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bad
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announcement
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good
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announcement
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people’s
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information
to population.

Visibly
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bad
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present
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lot
of popularity,
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bad
reports
are admired
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people
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people’s
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such as actors, politicians and sportsmen, they can addict
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people
to these kinds of
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announcements
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editors
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companies
should inform valuable
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news
, after that it
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helps
to
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improve
the thinking of individual and national development.
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, it is right of the editor to
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present
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only
that
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news
which is true and real.

To conclude
, public interest, choice, profit and publicity there is the main factor which influences the editor for the time of broadcasting. I do believe it is significant that we should
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change
the unreal advertisements to the real
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ones
for improving our thinking.
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IELTS essay News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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