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News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? v.2

News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? v. 2
In today’s modern world, a growing amount of news and information on television or newspapers have considerably influenced the public. Besides, what factors are impacted on reporting information on news media is an issue many people feel strongly about. This essay will discuss various influences as well as associated with phenomenon above. As far as I am concerned, there is a wide range of factor accounting for publishing news and broadcasts. The most noticeable, I believe, is that aiming at a high audience rating so as to maximise profits. This leads to pursuing the increasingly diverse needs of viewers from all walks of life in order to satisfy and cater to them. Another contributory factor is that for many countries, news editors have to succumb to political pressure, distorting facts and misleading the public. To put it another way, they are controlled entirely by powerful political parties and enjoined to disregard the truth. This is particularly true in many undemocratic countries like Chinese, North Korea, and Vietnam where information is seriously censored and even disseminated political ideals to guide public opinions. Moreover, living in the information era, people are bombarded with the daily amount of news, including good and bad news, from multiple media. Today’s coverage and press might sometimes be less trustworthy mainly because it often exaggerates the level of the real information, in order to boost the attention of the desired audiences. Furthermore, some media companies use the stories of people’s private life, seductive images and violent or obscene contents to appeal viewers, especially teenagers. It means that their thoughts and behaviours might be changed and shows a tendency to hatred, violence, jealousy, and even copycat phenomenon. However, the role of news media in reporting good news, such as someone’s achievement and human stories, should be acknowledged. That will make quicker progress toward society better. In conclusion, what today’s news and information on media we receive is influenced by some main factors as hooking viewers, increasing profits, and obeying political regulations. Besides, the news media can have a double-edged impact on society by the good and bad news. By doing so, we can ensure that choosing information carefully before reading and watching are indispensable to us.
In
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today
’s modern world, a growing amount of
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news
and
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information
on television or newspapers have
considerably
influenced the public.
Besides
, what
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factors
are impacted
on reporting
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information
on
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news
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media
is an issue
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many
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people
feel
strongly
about. This essay will discuss various influences
as well
as associated with phenomenon above.

As far as I
am concerned
, there is a wide range of
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factor
accounting for publishing
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news
and broadcasts. The most noticeable, I believe, is that aiming at a high audience rating
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so as to
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maximise
profits. This leads to pursuing the
increasingly
diverse needs of viewers from all walks of life in order to satisfy and cater to them. Another contributory
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factor
is that for
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many
countries,
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news
editors
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have to
succumb to political pressure, distorting facts and misleading the public. To put it another way, they
are controlled
entirely
by powerful political parties and enjoined to disregard the truth. This is
particularly
true in
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many
undemocratic countries like Chinese, North Korea, and Vietnam where
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information
is
seriously
censored and even disseminated political ideals to guide public opinions.

Moreover
, living in the
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information
era,
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people
are bombarded
with the daily amount of
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news
, including
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good
and
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bad
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news
, from multiple
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media
.
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Today
’s coverage and press might
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sometimes
be less trustworthy
mainly
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because
it
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often
exaggerates the level of the real
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information
, in order to boost the attention of the desired audiences.
Furthermore
,
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some
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media
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companies
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use
the stories of
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people
’s private life, seductive images and violent or obscene contents to appeal viewers,
especially
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teenagers
. It means that their thoughts and
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behaviours
might be
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changed
and
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shows
a tendency to hatred, violence, jealousy, and even copycat phenomenon.
However
, the role of
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news
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media
in reporting
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good
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news
, such as someone’s achievement and human stories, should
be acknowledged
. That will
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make
quicker progress toward society better.

In conclusion
, what
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today
’s
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news
and
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information
on
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media
we receive
is influenced
by
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some
main
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factors
as hooking viewers, increasing profits, and obeying political regulations.
Besides
, the
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news
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media
can have a double-edged impact on society by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
and
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bad
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news
. By doing
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so
, we can ensure that choosing
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information
carefully
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before
reading and watching are indispensable to us.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
368 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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