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News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news, and would it be better if more good news was reported? v.13

News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news, and would it be better if more good news was reported? v. 13
It is true that editors have to make difficult decisions about which news stories they broadcast or publish, and their choices are no doubt influenced by a variety of factors. In my opinion, we are exposed to too much bad news, and I would welcome a greater emphasis on good news. Editors face a range of considerations when deciding what news stories to focus on. Firstly, I imagine that they have to consider whether viewers or readers will be interested enough to choose their television channel or their newspaper over competing providers. Secondly, news editors have a responsibility to inform the public about important events and issues, and they should therefore prioritise stories that are in the public interest. Finally, editors are probably under some pressure from the owners who employ them. For example, a newspaper owner might have particular political views that he or she wants to promote. It seems to me that people do become accustomed to negative news. We are exposed on a daily basis to stories about war, crime, natural disasters and tragic human suffering around the world. I believe that such repeated exposure gradually desensitises people, and we become more cynical about the world and more sceptical that we can do anything to change it. I would prefer to see more positive news stories, such as reports of the work of medical staff after a natural disaster, or the kindness of volunteers who help in their communities. This kind of news might inspire us all to lead better lives. In conclusion, it must be extremely difficult for editors to choose which news stories to present, but I would like to see a more positive approach to this vital public service.
It is true that editors
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difficult decisions about which
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news
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stories
they broadcast or publish, and their choices are no doubt influenced by a variety of factors. In my opinion, we
are exposed
to too much
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bad
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news
, and I would welcome a greater emphasis on
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good
news.

Editors face a range of considerations when deciding what
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news
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stories
to focus on.
Firstly
, I imagine that they
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have to
consider whether viewers or readers will
be interested
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enough
to choose their television channel or their newspaper over competing providers.
Secondly
,
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news
editors have a responsibility to inform the public about
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important
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events
and issues, and they should
therefore
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prioritise
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stories
that are in the public interest.
Finally
, editors are
probably
under
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some
pressure from the owners who employ them.
For example
, a newspaper owner might have particular political views that he or she wants to promote.

It seems to me that
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people
do become accustomed to
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negative
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news
. We
are exposed
on a daily basis to
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stories
about war, crime, natural disasters and tragic human suffering around the world. I believe that such repeated exposure
gradually
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desensitises
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people
, and we become more cynical about the world and more
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sceptical
that we can do anything to
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change
it. I would prefer to
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see
more
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positive
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news
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stories
, such as reports of the work of medical staff after a natural disaster, or the kindness of volunteers who
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help
in their communities. This kind of
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news
might inspire us all to lead better
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lives
.

In conclusion
, it
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must
be
extremely
difficult for editors to choose which
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news
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stories
to present,
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but
I would like to
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see
a more
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positive
approach to this vital public service.
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IELTS essay News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news, and would it be better if more good news was reported? v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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