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News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in a newspaper. What factors do you think influence their decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported?

News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in a newspaper. What factors do you think influence their decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? v. 2
News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in a newspaper. There are two factors that influence their decisions. The first is the kind of customers they aim at. Because each kind of readers and watchers has its own features. For example, if your customers are almost entirely teenagers, you have to concentrate on something attracting them such as stories, photographs of singer stars, film stars, funny tales, and fashion. It will be very silly if you try to provide teenagers with economic or politic news. On the contrary, besiness men and politicians may never read news about James Blunt or Keira Knightley. Therefore, what influences news editors’ decisions the most is the taste of their customers. The second factor is how hot and attractive the news is. Who will reads or watch news from a year or a month ago or even about something that happened last week? The answer is nobody absolutely. In the energetic and competitive world nowadays, people always ask for a really new news. So that to satisfy customers, there is a pressure on all editors to find continually what has already happened not only yesterday but even an hour ago. Or else, they may lose their customers. None of editors wants that bleak future. The type of news is also an important consideration. Whether on television or in newspapers, we seem to get more of and become used to bad news. It is harder for us to come across a piece of good news. We can’t deny that bad things happen on Earth day by day. However, news editors try to gain more and more customer, which means more and more money, using bad news as a magnet. Because bad news makes us curious. We want to know why it is bad, what it is about, whether it influences us or not. As a result, we will buy newspapers or watch television to find out. And the happiest people are, of course, news editors. In my view it would be better if more good news were reported. Bad news makes us worry and sad. Whereas good news makes us happy. There should an an equal amount of good and bad news. In that way we can give something bad a lot of thought while still being happy about the good news. Any inequalities between good news and bad news should be avoided. Nowadays we cannot live without news, and for that reason the role of news editors became very important. We should support them, and in turn they should try their best to provide us with useful news, both good and bad.
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editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in a newspaper. There are two factors that influence their decisions. The
first
is the kind of
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customers
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own
features.
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customers
are almost
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teenagers
, you
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concentrate on something attracting them such as stories, photographs of singer stars, film stars,
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funny
tales, and fashion. It will be
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very
silly if you try to provide
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teenagers
with economic or politic
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news
.
On the contrary
,
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men
and politicians may never read
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about James Blunt or Keira
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Knightley
.
Therefore
, what influences
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editors’ decisions the most is the taste of their
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customers
. The second factor is how hot and attractive the
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news
is. Who will reads or
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watch
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from a year or a month ago or even about something that happened last week? The answer is nobody
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people
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.
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So
that to satisfy
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customers
, there is a pressure on all editors to find
continually
what has already happened not
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only
yesterday
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even an hour ago. Or else, they may lose their
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customers
. None of editors wants that bleak future.

The type of
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is
also
an
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important
consideration. Whether on television or in newspapers, we seem to
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get
more of and become
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bad
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. It is harder for us to
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come
across a piece of
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good
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news
. We can’t deny that
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bad
things happen on Earth day by day.
However
,
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news
editors try to gain more and more
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customer
, which means more and more money, using
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bad
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news
as a magnet.
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makes
us curious. We want to know why it is
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bad
, what it is about, whether it influences us or not.
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, we will
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buy
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television to find out. And the happiest
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people
are,
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,
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editors.

In my view it would be better if more
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good
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were reported
.
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Bad
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makes
us worry and sad.
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. In that way we can give something
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thought
while
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. Any inequalities between
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and
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should
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without
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, and for that reason the role of
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editors became
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very
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important
. We should support them, and in turn they should try their best to provide us with useful
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news
, both
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and
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.
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IELTS essay News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in a newspaper. What factors do you think influence their decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported?

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
442 words
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