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News about celebrities or ordinary people

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One of the trendy title of media is about lives and relationship of Famous persons like actor singers and football players, instead of spending more time to report the lives of ordinary people and what they need. In the following we will try to choose that which one has more advantage for people, report news about celebrities or anything else. About disadvantages of publishing news about celebrities lives and their secret relationships, we should mention that, it shows people what they don’t have and in a number of cases what they can't achieve. Somebody believe it may push people to work hard for their dreams however ithink a number of dreams of ordinary people are not achievable. Another point is, although some celebrities don’t experience any problem about that, society know about their personal life on the contrary numerous of them don’t like to share their life and shared with popularity. About advantages of that, we can mention that it helps celebrities advocates to follow them and it causes preparing more chances for celebrities to progress. On the other hand, ordinary community need daily news about rate of changing prices, political decisions, climate change and weather news, and they seem much more useful than news about private life. In conclusion, reporting news about actors, football players, singers lives and their relationships can be part of our daily news, on the contrary, it seems it is not as applicable as news about ordinary people and their needs, because it can’t be helpful for them to manage their life more easily.
One of the trendy title of media is about
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lives
and relationship of
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Famous
persons like actor singers and football players,
instead
of spending more time to report the
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lives
of
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ordinary
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people
and what they need. In the following we will try to choose that which one has more advantage for
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people
, report
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news
about
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celebrities
or anything else. About disadvantages of publishing
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news
about
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celebrities
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lives
and their secret relationships, we should mention that, it
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shows
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people
what they don’t have and in a number of cases what they can't achieve. Somebody
The pronoun 'Somebody' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "believes", "believed".
believe
it may push
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people
to work
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hard
for their dreams
however
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ithink
a number of dreams of
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ordinary
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people
are not achievable. Another point is, although
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some
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celebrities
don’t experience any problem about that, society know about their personal
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life
on the contrary
numerous of them don’t like to share their
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life
and shared with popularity. About advantages of that, we can mention that it
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helps
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celebrities
advocates to follow them and it causes preparing more chances for
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celebrities
to progress.
On the other hand
,
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ordinary
community need daily
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news
about rate of changing prices, political decisions, climate
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change
and weather
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news
, and they seem much more useful than
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news
about private
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life
.
In conclusion
, reporting
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news
about actors, football players, singers
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lives
and their relationships can be part of our daily
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news
,
on the contrary
, it seems it is not as applicable as
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news
about
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ordinary
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people
and their needs,
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because
it can’t be helpful for them to manage their
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life
more
easily
.
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IELTS essay News about celebrities or ordinary people

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
259 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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