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New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. with this opinion? 6QD8
Advancement in the technology and development of new shopping platforms has dramatically changed everyone’s lives. I do agree to this opinion. Shopping at malls & online purchasing are the new options which have succeeded in attracting the consumers charismatically. Online shopping has made a revolutionary impact on people‘s selling & buying habits. Now, it has become quite easy to purchase or sell the things online just in one click. For example, in earlier times, we physically had to approach the shops to sell the motor vehicle, but nowadays, the deal can be finalized online by simply uploading few pictures, features and specifications of the vehicle. In addition to this, people can compare a variety of products and can have the optimum choice. One of the major benefit of online shopping is that the things can be delivered at your door step rapidly with discounted price. Similarly, shopping at malls has also become a trend these days. With a wide range of options available for a single item has given people a significant reason to choose them as their shopping platform. Staring displays, promotions, exchange offers and discounts on the wish list items have captivated the people to buy things at malls. With all the advantages associated to these new shopping options, people are getting addicted to them inadvertently, which is not correct. In the few instances, consumers have encountered various problems pertaining to the quality & specifications of the product. For example the shirt ordered online may differ in size to the actual size ordered or may have deteriorated quality in comparison to quality guaranteed. Concluding my opinion, I think the technology & new shopping modes have no doubt made the life easier but can turn into curse if not dealt wisely.
Advancement in the technology and development of
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new
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shopping
platforms has
dramatically
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changed
everyone’s
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lives
. I do
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agree
to this opinion.
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Shopping
at malls &
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online
purchasing are the
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new
options which have succeeded in attracting the consumers
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charismatically
.

Online
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shopping
has made a revolutionary impact on
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people‘s
selling & buying habits.
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Now
, it has become quite easy to
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purchase
or sell the things
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online
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just
in one click.
For example
, in earlier times, we
physically
had to approach the shops to sell the motor vehicle,
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but
nowadays, the deal can
be finalized
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online
by
simply
uploading few pictures, features and specifications of the vehicle.
In addition
to this,
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people
can compare a variety of products and can have the optimum choice. One of the major benefit of
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online
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shopping
is that the things can
be delivered
at your door step
rapidly
with discounted price.

Similarly
,
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shopping
at malls has
also
become a trend these days. With a wide range of options available for a single item has
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given
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people
a significant reason to choose them as their
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shopping
platform. Staring displays, promotions, exchange offers and discounts on the wish list items have captivated the
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people
to
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buy
things at malls.

With all the advantages associated to these
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new
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shopping
options,
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people
are getting addicted to them
inadvertently
, which is not correct. In the few instances, consumers have encountered various problems pertaining to the quality & specifications of the product.
For example
the shirt ordered
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online
may differ in size to the actual size ordered or may have deteriorated quality
in comparison
to quality guaranteed.

Concluding my opinion, I
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think
the technology &
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new
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shopping
modes have no doubt made the life easier
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but
can turn into curse if not dealt
wisely
.
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IELTS essay New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. with this opinion?

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292 words
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