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It was a nice morning and I was taking my wonderful summer trip. There were two women crossing to me when I was sitting on the shore. They started to ask me about some nonsense things like my name, my age, and if I want to have a rich husband. This sounds like prostitution brokers and I thought that was who they were. After a few minutes of suffering to answer, I decided to stand up and walk away. However, the moment I got to my feet, I felt extremely dizzy and could not stand firm. Then I swooned immediately and could not be aware of anything around anymore. When I fell down, I just heard my brother say “Hey, let my sister go” and I felt that a lot of people ran to me. After taking a nap, I woke up and saw all members of my family were there. I asked about what had happened and my mother just said I almost became a Chinese daughter-in-law. It was five minutes and I felt frightened about everything that had just come to me. There was a little bit of fear and funk. After that, I have understood my mother’s advice more about never interacting with strangers when we are alone.

It was a nice Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).morning, and
morning and
 I was taking my wonderful summer trip. There were two women crossing to me when I was sitting on the shore. They This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 to ask me about This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 nonsense things like my name, my age, and if I want to have a rich husband. This sounds like prostitution You should probably use "broker".broker
brokers
 and I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonedassumedbelievedconsidered
thought
 that was who they were. After a few minutes of suffering to answer, I decided to stand up and walk away. However
, the moment I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
got
 to my feet, I felt extremely
 dizzy and could not stand firm. Then I swooned immediately and could not be aware of anything around anymore. When I fell down, I This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 heard my brother say “Hey, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
let
 my sister go” and I felt that This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
a lot of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 ran to me. After taking a nap, I woke up and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
 all members of my family were there. I asked about what had happened and my mother This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 said I almost became a Chinese daughter-in-law. It was five minutes and I felt frightened about everything that had This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 to me. There was a Reduce redundancy by using "little" or "bit".littlebit
little bit
 of fear and funk. After that, I have understood my mother’s advice more about never interacting with strangers when we are alone. 