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Nama saya Wina Dian Savitri. Saya seorang dosen di Fakultas Bioteknologi Universitas Surabaya, Indonesia. Saya menulis untuk melamar posisi Ph.D dalam Interaksi Mikroba Tumbuhan di Universitas Amsterdam, Belanda.

Nama saya Wina Dian Savitri. Saya seorang dosen di Fakultas Bioteknologi Universitas Surabaya, Indonesia. Saya menulis untuk melamar posisi Ph. D dalam Interaksi Mikroba Tumbuhan di Universitas Amsterdam, Belanda. qkllw
My name is Wina Dian Savitri. I am a lecturer at the Faculty of Biotechnology in University of Surabaya, Indonesia. I am writing to apply for the Ph. D position in Plant-microbe Interactions at the University of Amsterdam, Netherlands. I fell in love in plants science since I was at high school, but I was unlucky that during my Bachelor study at the Biology Department at the Airlangga University, that I could not join the plant tissue culture project because the laboratory was too crowded. But then, when I took my Master study at the Kyungpook National University, South Korea, I had a chance to study about plants. My dream came true! My Professor’s project at that time was about viroid elimination from chrysanthemum plants. At that time, I enjoyed working with plants by using tissue culture methods. The projects aimed to get rid of the Chrysanthemum Stunt Viroid (CSVd) from the infected plants inside the bottle. The combination of cold temperature and antiviral agents were tested on the growing shoot apical meristem. Fortunately, the treatments were successful to eliminate the viroid from the plantlets. We used RT-PCR to test the viroid inside the plants. When I got accepted as a lecturer and researcher at the University of Surabaya, I was assigned at the Plant Biotechnology Laboratory. My colleagues were all experts in plant tissue culture and breeding of paddy rice, Indonesian orchids, and also Korean ginseng. I thought that it will be nice and important for me to be an expert too. I chose to be an expert in plant pathology because there is still no one at the Laboratory who has this kind of expertise. In addition, to understand plant pathology more deeply can solve various problems in agriculture as well as forestry. As Indonesia is a agrarian country and there is an elevating cases of deforestation, it is important to create plants that can grow fast and plants that are resistant to pathogens attack. My on going experiments are about bacterial endophyte isolation from mangrove plant and right now we are trying to observe the mangrove’s effects towards endophytes injection. Since endophyte has many benefit for plants, for example to increase plant’s immunity towards pathogens, the production of plant hormones, siderophore production, and so on. In couple of months we will continue our research on spontaneous mutant production from endophytic bacteria to track the plant endophyte in host plants. I see in your advertisement that the The Swammerdam Institute for Life Sciences (SILS) is mostly working in molecular plant pathology. I eiger to study more about this subject and I hope that you will consider me as one of the candidates. Thank you for your consideration and attention. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
My name is
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Wina
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Dian
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Savitri
. I am a lecturer at the Faculty of Biotechnology in
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University
of Surabaya, Indonesia. I am writing to apply for the
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Ph. D
position in Plant-microbe Interactions at the
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University
of Amsterdam, Netherlands.

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fell in
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love
in
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plants
science since I was at high school,
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but
I was unlucky that during my Bachelor
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study
at the Biology Department at the
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Airlangga
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University
, that I could not
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join
the
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plant
tissue culture project
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because
the laboratory was too crowded.
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But
then, when I took my Master
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study
at the
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Kyungpook
National
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University
, South Korea, I had a chance to
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study
about
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plants
. My dream came true! My Professor’s project at that time was about
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viroid
elimination from chrysanthemum
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plants
. At that time, I enjoyed working with
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plants
by using tissue culture methods. The projects aimed to
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get
rid of the Chrysanthemum Stunt
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Viroid
(
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CSVd
) from the infected
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plants
inside the bottle. The combination of
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cold
temperature and antiviral agents were
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tested
on the growing shoot apical
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meristem
.
Fortunately
, the treatments were successful to eliminate the
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viroid
from the
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plantlets
. We
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used
RT-PCR to
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test
the
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viroid
inside the plants.

When I
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got
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accepted
as a lecturer and researcher at the
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University
of Surabaya, I
was assigned
at the
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Plant
Biotechnology Laboratory. My colleagues were all experts in
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plant
tissue culture and breeding of paddy rice, Indonesian orchids, and
also
Korean ginseng. I
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thought
that it will be nice and
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important
for me to be an expert too. I chose to be an expert in
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plant
pathology
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because
there is
still
no one at the Laboratory who has this kind of expertise.
In addition
, to understand
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plant
pathology more
deeply
can solve various problems in agriculture
as well
as forestry. As Indonesia is
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a
agrarian country and there is an elevating cases of deforestation, it is
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important
to create
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plants
that can grow
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fast
and
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plants
that are resistant to pathogens attack.

My
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experiments are about bacterial
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endophyte
isolation from mangrove
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plant
and right
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now
we are trying to observe the mangrove’s effects towards
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endophytes
injection. Since
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endophyte
has
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many benefit
for
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,
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to increase
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plant’s
immunity towards pathogens, the production of
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plant
hormones,
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siderophore
production, and
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on. In
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couple of
months we will continue our research on spontaneous mutant production from
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endophytic
bacteria to
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track
the
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plant
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endophyte
in host plants.

I
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see
in your advertisement that
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the The
Swammerdam Institute for Life Sciences (
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SILS
) is
mostly
working in molecular
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plant
pathology. I
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eiger
to
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study
more about this subject and I hope that you will consider me as one of the candidates.

Thank you for your consideration and attention. I look forward to hearing from you
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soon
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IELTS essay Nama saya Wina Dian Savitri. Saya seorang dosen di Fakultas Bioteknologi Universitas Surabaya, Indonesia. Saya menulis untuk melamar posisi Ph. D dalam Interaksi Mikroba Tumbuhan di Universitas Amsterdam, Belanda.

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