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My personality and things that affect it

My personality and things that affect it p1PRD
My name is Nhan, I currently living in HCM city during this quarantine. Now I’m here to introduce myself to you, about my personality and how things around me affect it. I think that people see me as an outgoing person because sometimes I'm energetic and being self-confident during some group/class activities. But I'm acting like that because I think that it will help me to be closer to everyone if they feel comfortable while working with me. I also try to be open-minded all the time since my first year in EMASI so I can easily integrate into a brand-new environment (I think it's just because I'm afraid of being isolated by classmates because I'm just a stranger when everyone already knows each other. ) I describe myself as an introvert, I like to keep quiet almost every time unless I want to talk more about it or something important that requires me to tell more details. Sometimes it’s meaningless when both are trying to prove that they’re right and it continues so long until one loses, the other wins because they reasoner than. I learned that the best way to solve it is to keep quiet and analyze different ideas to find the right one so that things can turn faster in a positive way without fighting like a kid. I’m optimistic all the time but I always caution, think about what could happen if I do this and that to avoid bad things happening. I think I have those personalities because I’ve been affected by the surrounding. At first, I’m very clumsy and my parents always tell me to be careful while holding things. Unlike my mom, she is very skillful at every field in my house, from cooking to cleaning, nothing she can’t do without a perfect result. Also, in the past few years, I made a bunch of mistakes (XD) that caused them to scold me many times, and each time I cried, I felt that it's not going to change anything, so the safest way to go through it is to keep myself positive at all the time. If you do something wrong, apology then don’t do it again.
My name is
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Nhan
, I
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HCM
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people
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me as an outgoing person
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sometimes
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class
activities.
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I'm acting like that
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I
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help
me to be closer to everyone if they feel comfortable while working with me. I
also
try to be open-minded all the
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time
since my
first
year in EMASI
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so
I can
easily
integrate into a brand-new environment (I
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think
it's
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just
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because
I'm afraid of
being isolated
by classmates
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because
I'm
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just
a stranger when everyone already knows each other.
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I
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describe
myself as an introvert, I like to
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keep
quiet almost every
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time
unless I want to talk more about it or something
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important
that requires me to
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tell
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Sometimes
it’s meaningless when both are trying to prove that they’re right and it continues
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long until one loses, the other wins
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because
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they reasoner
than. I learned that the best way to solve it is to
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keep
quiet and analyze
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different
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ideas
to find the right one
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so
that things can turn faster in a
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positive
way without fighting like a kid. I’m optimistic all the
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time
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I always caution,
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think
about what could happen if I do this and that to avoid
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bad
things happening.

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I
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think
I have those personalities
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because
I’ve been
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affected
by the surrounding. At
first
, I’m
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very
clumsy and my parents always
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tell
me to be careful while holding things. Unlike my mom, she is
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very
skillful at every field in my
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house
, from cooking to cleaning, nothing she can’t do without a perfect result.
Also
, in the past few years, I made a bunch of mistakes (
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XD
) that caused them to scold me
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many
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times
, and each
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time
I cried, I felt that it's not going to
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change
anything,
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so
the safest way to go through it is to
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keep
myself
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positive
at all the
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time
. If you do something
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wrong
, apology then don’t do it again.
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IELTS essay My personality and things that affect it

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
365 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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