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My holiday at home and the time I spend at home during school holiday.

My holiday at home and the time I spend at home during school holiday. ABY5w
The unexpected holiday began when I was informed by a teacher, will close the school because worse Covoid-19 generated are infecting other countries too. The government is going to conduct a lockdown of the country soon. I was extremely concerned about if school is not open for a long period of time, what should I do. The time was exactly 2days before a holiday, so I was anxious, but also felt excited too. The holiday that I expected was full of leisure and activities such as watching the whole series of dramas, movies and playing games with my friends. Nevertheless, I wasn’t feeling positive about studying during a holiday, however, I couldn’t refuse to study. The first few days of the holiday were sufficient to make me relax and lazy. However, It was as plain as if I spent my time without any plan for the future, it would become a waste of time. I started to plan, even though following exactly what I planned to do wasn’t easy to keep, I tried my best to spend my time efficiently by doing study and exercises. After the holiday finished, my unexpected holiday began. I was taking school online classes from 08: 00 until 02: 40 with 1hour per one lesson. After the school hours finished, I started to do revisions for each of the subjects by making notes and solving past year papers. I was so tired, but I couldn’t stop worrying about the exam that will begin soon. In recent days, I am feeling satisfied with my successful plans and trying to keep this process going until the end of the unexpected holiday.
The unexpected
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began when I
was informed
by a teacher, will close the
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school
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because
worse Covoid-19 generated are infecting other countries too. The
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government
is going to conduct a lockdown of the country
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soon
. I was
extremely
concerned about if
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school
is not open for a long period of
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time
, what should I do. The
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time
was exactly 2days
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before
a
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,
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so
I was anxious,
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but
also
felt excited too. The
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that I
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expected
was full of leisure and activities such as watching the whole series of dramas, movies and playing games with my friends.

Nevertheless
, I wasn’t feeling
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positive
about studying during a
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,
however
, I couldn’t refuse to study. The
first
few days of the
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holiday
were sufficient to
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make
me relax and lazy.
However
, It was as plain as if I spent my
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time
without any plan for the future, it would become a waste of
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time
. I
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started
to plan,
even though
following exactly what I planned to do wasn’t easy to
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keep
, I tried my best to spend my
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time
efficiently
by doing study and exercises.

After the
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finished, my unexpected
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holiday
began. I was taking
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school
online classes from 08: 00 until 02: 40 with 1hour per one lesson. After the
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school
hours finished, I
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started
to do revisions for each of the subjects by making notes and solving past year papers. I was
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so
tired,
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but
I couldn’t
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stop
worrying about the exam that will
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begin
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soon
.

In recent days, I am feeling satisfied with my successful plans and trying to
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keep
this process going until the
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end
of the unexpected
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holiday
.
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IELTS essay My holiday at home and the time I spend at home during school holiday.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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