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My hobby is playing football

My hobby is playing football OyYM3
My name is Minh. I wanna talk to you my hobby. For me, hobby is an activity that you like to do and i think each person needs to have 1 hobby at least to improve the creation of each person. And my hobby is playing football. Playing football is one of the most popular hobby in the world, especially for boys and male teenagers. Nowadays, it becomes a job and becomes the most popular individual sport in the world. I usually play football in my leisure time. I play this sport with my friend who is very like sports. I’ve played football since I was 9 years old and it made impression on me at first because of the way to play it. It’s very easy that you only use your foot to kick the ball to the goal. But after a few time, you need to practice how to shoot exactly, how to control the ball, . . . and you will find it hard in there. If you want to follow this hobby, you will take more effort into it. . I find playing football interesting, helpful and I’m accdicted to it. Of course that in the future I will continue playing football. I hope that COVID-19 pandemic will disappear, so I can play football with my friends
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Minh
. I wanna talk to you my
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hobby
. For me,
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is an activity that you like to do and
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i
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each person needs to have 1
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at least to
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improve
the creation of each person. And my
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is
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playing
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football
.
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Playing
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football
is one of the most popular
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hobby
in the world,
especially
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teenagers
. Nowadays, it becomes a job and becomes the most popular individual sport in the world. I
usually
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play
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football
in my leisure time. I
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play
this sport with my friend who is
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very
like sports.
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I
’ve played
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football
since I was 9 years
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and it made impression on me at
first
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of the way to
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it. It’s
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easy that you
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your foot to kick the ball to the goal.
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after a
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, you need to practice how to shoot exactly, how to control the ball
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, .
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and
you will find it
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in there. If you want to follow this
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hobby
, you will take more effort into it.
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I find
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football
interesting, helpful and I’m
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accdicted
to it.
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that in the future I will continue
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playing
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football
. I hope that COVID-19 pandemic will disappear,
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play
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football
with my
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friends
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IELTS essay My hobby is playing football

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
220 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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