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My hobby is listening to music

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. Listening to music is my hobby. I started my hobby 3 years ago. I share this hobby with my best friend. But she likes listening to Kpop music and I usually listen to US-UK music. I often listen when I do the housework and I have a free time. I’m interested in gentle melody. I usually listen to US-UK music. Because it can improve my English skill. Sometimes I also listen to music and dancing. I feel so relaxed when doing it. I also often collect music discs. In the future, I want to be a musician.
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when I do the housework and I have a free time. I’m interested in gentle melody.
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my English
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IELTS essay My hobby is listening to music

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
98 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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