Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Nowadays we see an increase in social problems

Nowadays we see an increase in social problems jbM6X
Recently, it has been noticed a raising of social issues is facing the adolescence that due to absence of parents all the day because the tough life needs father and mother to work hard and return to their home late. I will show you in this essay how I strongly agree with this idea. Adolescence need continuously observation by adult. However, the life is extremely hard which means the life requires from parents to work day and night and struggle to provide their families with essential components of life that make them to forget to take care of their youth adequately. Subsequently, teenagers become free to do anything without thinking on it which leads teenagers to drop in many social issues. For example, when adolescence was missing attention and caring, they try to find it from another person. Whose know may this new friend takes advantage of them and implicate them in crime. In all there is a high rate of juvenile delinquency in this area. There is no doubt that parents’ preoccupation with how to facilitate the life for their children and upgrade their financial that lead to negligence to occur. Especially with technology like smartphone, electronics and Internet that makes easy teenagers to spend a lot of time with electronic games which loss their time; in addition, the family which lost communication can’t make a good memory together. Thus, lead to more dissociation between members of one family. In conclusion that I strongly believe that parents had a big role in upbringing their children. Furthermore, the responsibility falls on fathers and mother maybe it is not easy, and it is hard but there is no one will be caring on children more than their parents and this deserves to provide some time for them.
Recently, it has
been noticed
a raising of social issues is facing the adolescence that due to absence of
parents
all the day
because
the tough
life
needs father and mother to work
hard
and return to their home late. I will
show
you in this essay how I
strongly
agree
with this
idea
.

Adolescence need
continuously
observation by adult.
However
, the
life
is
extremely
hard
which means the
life
requires from
parents
to work day and night and struggle to provide their families with essential components of
life
that
make
them to forget to take care of their youth
adequately
.
Subsequently
,
teenagers
become free to do anything without thinking on it which leads
teenagers
to drop in
many
social issues.
For example
, when adolescence was missing attention and caring, they try to find it from another person. Whose know may this new friend takes advantage of them and implicate them in crime. In all there is a high rate of juvenile delinquency in this area.

There is no doubt that
parents’
preoccupation with how to facilitate the
life
for their children and upgrade their financial that lead to negligence to occur.
Especially
with technology like smartphone, electronics and Internet that
makes
easy
teenagers
to spend
a lot of
time with electronic games which loss their time;
in addition
, the family which lost communication can’t
make
a
good
memory together.
Thus
, lead to more dissociation between members of one family.

In conclusion
that I
strongly
believe that
parents
had a
big
role in upbringing their children.
Furthermore
, the responsibility falls on fathers and mother maybe it is not easy, and it is
hard
but
there is no one will be caring on children more than their
parents
and this deserves to provide
some
time for them.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Nowadays we see an increase in social problems

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts