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My best mamorable birthday

My best mamorable birthday KyRG3
I think all people around the world love their birthday. Because, in that day we get a lot of gifts from our parents, relatives, friends and others. That is why our birthday will be mamorable for us. I have my mamorable birthday too. In my mamorable birthday I was slept. In that time my parents were decorated our hose and they made many gifts for me. When I woke up they shouted with saying: "Happy birthday to you. " I was very suprised from that. And all day I was very happy. I think all people's all birthday will be mamorable for them. Because, in that day they were born and breath from the air. In that day all people from our family will be happy. And that day will be amazing for them. Because of this facts our all birthdays will be mamorable for us.
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IELTS essay My best mamorable birthday

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
146 words
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