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Museums should nit charge any fees for visitors?

Museums should nit charge any fees for visitors? lWVeQ
Museums are the mind - blowing place were a bunch of information is provided about history. My personal view is entry for museums should be free. No charges should be taken form visitors. According to some people there should be no charge to get access for entering museums, but in contrast some cookies think that minimal charges should taken. In upcoming paragraphs i will elaborate my both points. To get knowledge about history no fee for entrance should be charged by authorities. At the place where museum is situated, taxpayer pays tax and if government charges for entry then it would be discriminating for the locals. For an example, there are so many places where tourists form all around the globe come to visit. If Indian government charges more, then the amount of visitors will become less which directly affects the financial system of the country. Another statement is, free things attract more peoples. we all know that free things are more attractive then paid. Tourists want information about history for free, because of this more and more visitors are encouraged which is a plus point for government and more knowledge about the history is reached to people all around the world. Advocating above paragraphs the first and foremost sentence is about the maintenance of the museums. The money for maintaning museums comes form these fees. Maintenance of any thing is most important, hence monthly and yearly maintenance of museums which includes security, timely renovation etc. If security is less then it can be main reason behind theft of expensive and important articles. Another reason is, A significant budget of government can be saved. If museums are self - dependent that government would not have to allocate different budget for the museums and this budget can be used somewhere else. In order to conclude, there should be minimal fees for museum and art galleries so that every human kind can take advantage of museums, so more and more information an individual can get knowledge and museums and art galleries will be presevered too.
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blowing place were a bunch of information
is provided
about
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history
. My personal view is entry for
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museums
should be
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free
. No
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charges
should
be taken
form visitors. According to
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some
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people
there should be no
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charge
to
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get
access for entering
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museums
,
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but
in contrast
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some
cookies
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think
that minimal
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charges
should
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taken
. In upcoming paragraphs
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i
will elaborate my both points.

To
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get
knowledge about
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history
no fee for entrance should
be charged
by authorities. At the place where
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museum
is situated
, taxpayer pays tax and if
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government
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charges
for entry then it would be discriminating for the locals. For an example, there are
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so
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many
places where tourists form all around the globe
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come
to visit. If Indian
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government
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charges
more, then the amount of visitors will become less which
directly
affects the financial system of the country. Another statement is,
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free
things attract more peoples.
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we
all know that
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free
things are more attractive
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then
paid. Tourists want information about
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history
for
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free
,
because of this
more and more visitors
are encouraged
which is a plus point for
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government
and more knowledge about the
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history
is reached
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
all around the world.

Advocating above paragraphs the
first
and foremost sentence is about the maintenance of the
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museums
. The money for
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maintaning
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museums
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comes
form these fees. Maintenance of
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any thing
is most
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important
,
hence
monthly and yearly maintenance of
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museums
which includes security, timely renovation etc. If security is less
Comparison requires "than", not 'then' nor 'as'.
then
it can be main reason behind theft of expensive and
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important
articles. Another reason is, A significant budget of
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government
can
be saved
. If
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museums
are self
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-
dependent that
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government
would not
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have to
allocate
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different
budget for the
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museums
and this budget can be
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used
somewhere else.

In order
to conclude
, there should be minimal fees for
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museum
and art galleries
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so
that every human kind can take advantage of
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museums
,
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so
more and more information an individual can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
knowledge and
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museums
and art galleries will be
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presevered
too.
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IELTS essay Museums should nit charge any fees for visitors?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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