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Museums are important as they promote the culture and heritage of country. With technology all the information regarding this can be freely found. Will museums be no longer required? To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Museums are important as they promote the culture and heritage of country. With technology all the information regarding this can be freely found. Will museums be no longer required? v. 1
Museums play a crucial role in preserving the culture and foster tradition of any country whereas, the advancement of technology is another source to get the knowledge of any historical places, creative work and art galleries, However, we can not replace public museums with any new technology because this could only work as a supplement. Hence. I quite disagree with the given statement. On the one hand, electronic media can never diminish the significance of the public museums and art galleries because images, videos of any historical places, objects, creative work and art have no comparison with the real things although computers have plethora of information regarding these things but visiting such places give you total different experience and exposure. For example, In Pakistan there is Makli graveyard, a historical monument has a beautiful and ancient architecture. Visiting and getting info from the internet are two different feelings and experience. In addition, Historical places are the biggest source of exchange of different ideas, culture and opens the way to meet with various people that enhances the value of the country as well as promotes communication and interaction between them. People from different states travel to visit such kind of places to gather information, knowledge and gives gratifying experience. It is the best opportunity to learn through diverse cultures and traditions and even they follow too. For instance, William and Kate had been seen recently in the visit to Pakistan and its historical places, not only this they even there traditional values which was phenomenal. To sum up, museums have its own worth that we cannot replace with modern technology through computers. It has an abundance of information, but visiting physically gives totally different meanings.
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Museums
play a crucial role in preserving the culture and foster tradition of any country whereas, the advancement of technology is another source to
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get
the knowledge of any
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historical
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places
, creative work and art galleries,
However
, we can not replace public
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museums
with any new technology
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because
this could
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only
work as a supplement.
Hence
. I quite disagree with the
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given
statement.

On the one hand, electronic media can never diminish the significance of the public
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museums
and art galleries
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because
images, videos of any
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historical
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places
, objects, creative work and art have no comparison with the real things although computers have plethora of information regarding these things
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but
visiting such
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places
give you total
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different
experience and exposure.
For example
, In Pakistan there is
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Makli
graveyard, a
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historical
monument has a
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beautiful
and ancient architecture. Visiting and getting info from the internet are two
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different
feelings and experience.

In addition
,
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Historical
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places
are the biggest source of exchange of
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different
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ideas
, culture and opens the way to
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meet
with various
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people
that enhances the value of the country
as well
as promotes communication and interaction between them.
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People
from
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different
states travel to visit such kind of
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places
to gather information, knowledge and gives gratifying experience. It is the best opportunity to learn through diverse cultures and traditions and even they follow too.
For instance
, William and Kate had been
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seen
recently in the visit to Pakistan and its
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historical
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places
, not
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only
this they even there traditional values which was phenomenal.

To sum up,
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museums
have its
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own
worth that we cannot replace with modern technology through computers. It has an abundance of information,
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but
visiting
physically
gives
totally
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different
meanings.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Museums are important as they promote the culture and heritage of country. With technology all the information regarding this can be freely found. Will museums be no longer required? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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