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mothers play key role in the upbringing of children.But in th recent times both parents are getting busy with professional life.Who in your opinion should take the responsibility of child care now.

Mothers are extremely crucial for their children upbringing. Although, nowadays parents do not have free time for their children care because they are so busy with their jobs. I think mothers care one of the most useful method in child upbringing and I will discuss some reasons for this situation. First, in the past parents used to look after their children more than now, because they have a plethora of works to do
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they are
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think
mothers care one of the most useful
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in child upbringing and I will discuss
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reasons for this situation.
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to look after their children more than
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they have a plethora of works to do
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IELTS essay mothers play key role in the upbringing of children. But in th recent times both parents are getting busy with professional life. Who in your opinion should take the responsibility of child care now.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
72 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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