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Most people say that governments should give unemployed people phones and WIFI access to lessen the unemployment problem.

Most people say that governments should give unemployed people phones and WIFI access to lessen the unemployment problem. BMDg6
It has been suggested that governments should give jobless people phones and internet access to alleviate the unemployment problem. This essay will argue that, whilst this may be a good idea, it is certainly not the best way of using public money to solve the problem. To begin with, it could be seen as a positive step to give unemployed people phones and internet access. This would certainly help improve their lives in a small way and may give them the ability to hunt down job leads. However, it is a not a guaranteed method of finding employment. For one thing, phones are severely limited in comparison with computers, which would be far more useful for jobseekers. A computer is more appropriate for writing CVs and scrolling through lists of adverts. As such, perhaps public funds would be better spent on computers rather phones. In addition, the idea of just giving unemployed people technology in order to solve their problems seems a little wishful. The fact is that most people have phones and internet access in 2021, suggesting that this is not what prevents them from finding work. Perhaps the money would be better spent on job fairs, counselling, benefits, or even investment in local businesses to spur the hiring process. Indeed, whilst none of these are a perfect solution, they all seem rather more realistic and preferential than buying thousands of phones and internet contracts. In conclusion, while it may be a good idea to give all jobless people a phone and internet access, it is almost certainly not the best use of public funds in terms of tackling unemployment.
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governments
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people
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phones
and internet
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access
to alleviate the unemployment problem. This essay will argue that, whilst this may be a
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good
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idea
, it is
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begin
with, it could be
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seen
as a
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positive
step to
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give
unemployed
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people
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phones
and internet
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access
. This would
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help
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improve
their
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lives
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small
way and may
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give
them the ability to hunt down job leads.
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, it is a not a guaranteed method of finding employment. For one thing,
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phones
are
severely
limited
in comparison
with computers, which would be far more useful for
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jobseekers
. A computer is more appropriate for writing
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CVs
and scrolling through lists of adverts. As such, perhaps public funds would be better spent on computers
rather
phones.

In addition
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giving unemployed
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technology in order to solve their problems seems a
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wishful. The fact is that most
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people
have
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phones
and internet
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access
in 2021, suggesting that this is not what
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prevents
them from finding work. Perhaps the money would be better spent on job fairs, counselling, benefits, or even investment in local businesses to spur the hiring process.
Indeed
, whilst none of these are a perfect solution, they all seem
rather
more realistic and preferential than buying thousands of
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phones
and internet contracts.

In conclusion
, while it may be a
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good
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to
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all jobless
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people
a
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phone
and internet
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access
, it is almost
certainly
not the best
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use
of public funds in terms of tackling unemployment.
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IELTS essay Most people say that governments should give unemployed people phones and WIFI access to lessen the unemployment problem.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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