Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Most parents attempt to do what is best for their children’s proper development.

Most parents attempt to do what is best for their children’s proper development. Some people believe that teaching children to read early is going to help their future success. However, I do not agree with this notion. Reading skills are certainly important but in my opinion a 3 or 4 year old does not have to learn to read. I believe spending quality time with children and encouraging different play time activities are more / a lot more beneficial for the overall development of a child. In this essay, I will defend my stand / opinion with valid arguments. Firstly, we should understand that all children are different in terms of capabilities and needs. Hence compelling every child to learn to read from a very young age might prove to be counter-productive. While some children may take to this, others may develop apathy towards reading and this might prove to be a bigger problem when they start school. Furthermore I believe that if parents and teachers, engage young children in different interesting exercises, it is going to prove to be more fruitful than concentrating only on learning to read. For example, games like puzzles, coloring exercises and musical lessons are a lot more beneficial for the development of their motor and cognitive skills. In turn, this will have a better grip on their reading or speaking and they may learn to read or communicate even faster. Furthermore, I greatly support encouraging children to play outdoor games. This would enable them to be fit and also be in close proximity with nature which will enhance their social and cognitive skills all the more. Thus, I would like to conclude by saying that if parents give undue importance to introducing their child to reading at a young age, they may miss out on many fun activities. However, I also believe that reading should be included in a toddler’s schedule so that they are used to books from an early age which is a very good habit to have for their bright future.
Most parents attempt to do what is best for their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children’s
proper development.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
that teaching
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
read
early is going to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
their future success.
However
, I do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this notion.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Reading
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
are
certainly
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
in my opinion a 3 or 4 year
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
does not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
learn to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
read
. I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
spending quality time with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
and encouraging
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
play time activities are more / a lot more beneficial for the
overall
development of a child. In this essay, I will defend my stand / opinion with valid arguments.

Firstly
, we should understand that all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
in terms of capabilities and needs.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Hence
compelling every child to learn to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
read
from a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
young age might prove to be counter-productive. While
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
may take to this, others may develop apathy towards
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reading
and this might prove to be a bigger problem when they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
school.

Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Furthermore
I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
that if parents and teachers, engage young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
interesting exercises, it is going to prove to be more fruitful than concentrating
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
on learning to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
read
.
For example
, games like puzzles, coloring exercises and musical lessons are a lot more beneficial for the development of their motor and cognitive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. In turn, this will have a better grip on their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reading
or
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
speaking and
they may learn to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
read
or communicate even faster.
Furthermore
, I
greatly
support encouraging
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
to play outdoor games. This would enable them to
be fit
and
also
be in
Consider using “proximity”.
close proximity
with nature which will enhance their social and cognitive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
all the more.

Thus
, I would like
to conclude
by saying that if parents give undue importance to introducing their child to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reading
at a young age, they may miss out on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
fun activities.
However
, I
also
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reading
should
be included
in a toddler’s schedule
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to books from an early age which is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
habit to have for their bright future.

IELTS essay Most parents attempt to do what is best for their children’s proper development.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Most parents attempt to do what is best for their children’s proper development.