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Most of museum and historical sites visit by travels and no visit by local people.what can be done to attract local people towards these places.

Most of museum and historical sites visit by travels and no visit by local people. what can be done to attract local people towards these places. pX7a0
home state people don't like to visit their countries art galleries and religious building whereas other state people come to visit this sites. there are multivariate step behind this problem but it can be mitigated by taking appropriate policies. It is clearly be with that religional people have huge amount of knowledge regards to their art exhibition and ancient building consequently, a lack of interest has been create in their minds or heart which course to stay away to visit these sites. If care taker of art galleries and historical building changed something in these places at every month then it can create curiosity in local people to visit it. father more if human beings want to visit museum and historical sites then they have to pay some money to take the entry tickets and prices of tickets are same for every person to maintenance of building and museum. although it is necessary to take some money as to keep balance in art exhibition and culture sites but on the weekends if the cost of tickets reduced for local people then it can attract to visit these sites. In conclusion, aforementioned points clear that if local people can visit these sites at a few cost as compared to tourist and proper maintenance of building can be attract many native people to come here.
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people
don't like to
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visit
their countries
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art
galleries and religious
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building
whereas other state
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people
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come
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visit
this
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sites
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there
are multivariate
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behind this problem
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but
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clearly
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religional
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people
have huge amount of knowledge regards to their
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art
exhibition and ancient
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building
consequently
, a lack of interest has been
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create
in their minds or heart which course to stay away to
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visit
these
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sites
. If care taker of
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art
galleries and historical
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building
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changed
something in these places at every month then it can create curiosity in local
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people
to
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visit
it. father more if human beings want to
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visit
museum and historical
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sites
then they
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have to
pay
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some
money to take the entry tickets and prices of tickets are same for every person to maintenance of
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building
and museum.
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although
it is necessary to take
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some
money as to
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balance in
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art
exhibition and culture
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sites
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but
on the weekends if the cost of tickets
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reduced
for local
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people
then it can attract to
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visit
these
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sites
.
In conclusion
, aforementioned points
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clear
that if local
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people
can
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visit
these
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sites
at a few cost as compared to tourist and proper maintenance of
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building
can be
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attract
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native
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people
to
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come
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IELTS essay Most of museum and historical sites visit by travels and no visit by local people. what can be done to attract local people towards these places.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
223 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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