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There are certain individuals who contend that authority need not to give any kind assistance to another nation because it creates problems like poverty and unemployment. I totally disagree with this notion because of various reasons which will be elaborated in upcoming paragraphs.

There are certain individuals who contend that authority need not to give any kind assistance to another nation because it creates problems like poverty and unemployment. I totally disagree with this notion because of various reasons which will be elaborated in upcoming paragraphs. drA37
There are a plethora number of reasons for providing international support. Foremost reason is that it literally helps poor nations, which are facing problems of poverty. With international aid, poor community can lead a better life in terms of food, education as well as transportation as well. Helping out other countries by giving education and medical facilities can be proven beneficial to both givers and recipients because when poor countries start to build industries by taking loans then it will open more opportunities for people to involve in different functions and this method turn out to be reduction in unemployment. That being said, transferring money to offer assistance to another nation makes the relations strengthened between numerous lands. There should be separate foreign account in every society so that at difficult time all the nations come forward to give helping hand. This method definitely works to remove poverty because when the poor countries start to develop, then government of that area can recruit more staff from other nation. Moreover, if all the countries were willing to come ahead for helping poor countries, then the whole world will become peaceful place to live as well as there is less likely to occur wars among nations. For example, during natural calamities: tsunami, hurricane, wildfire and rising sea levels etcetera, developed societies can help to deter these situations and to recover poor nations swiftly. This thing also become inspiration for others. For example, the USA has donated $30 billion for helping poor nations. In conclusion, although government can allocate all money to own nation for improvement, it seems to me that shell out of funds for helping poor nations is more beneficial.
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literally
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helps
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poor
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nations
, which are facing problems of poverty. With international aid,
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poor
community can lead a better life in terms of food, education
as well
as transportation
as well
. Helping out other
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countries
by giving education and medical facilities can
be proven
beneficial to both givers and recipients
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because
when
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poor
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countries
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start
to build industries by taking loans then it will open more opportunities for
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people
to involve in
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different
functions and this method turn out to be reduction in unemployment. That
being said
, transferring money to offer assistance to another
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nation
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makes
the relations strengthened between numerous lands. There should be separate foreign account in every society
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so
that at difficult time all the
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nations
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
forward to give helping hand. This method definitely works to remove poverty
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because
when the
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poor
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countries
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to develop, then
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
of that area can recruit more staff from other
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nation
.
Moreover
, if all the
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countries
were willing to
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come
ahead for helping
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poor
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countries
, then the whole world will become peaceful place to
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live
as well
as there is less likely to occur wars among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
.
For example
, during natural calamities: tsunami, hurricane, wildfire and rising sea levels etcetera, developed societies can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to deter these situations and to recover
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
swiftly
. This thing
also
become inspiration for others.
For example
, the USA has donated $30 billion for helping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
poor
nations.

In conclusion
, although
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government
can allocate all money to
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own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nation
for improvement, it seems to me that shell out of funds for helping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
is more beneficial.
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IELTS essay There are certain individuals who contend that authority need not to give any kind assistance to another nation because it creates problems like poverty and unemployment. I totally disagree with this notion because of various reasons which will be elaborated in upcoming paragraphs.

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2 paragraphs
279 words
6.0
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