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Most leaders or directors generally belong to an older age group, but some people believe that young leaders are better. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Most leaders or directors generally belong to an older age group, but some people believe that young leaders are better. BYeRp
It is highly common that leadership positions are occupied by people in older age bracket, however some prefer young leaders for leadership roles. I completely disagree with this opinion as I personally believe older leaders bring higher value to the table. The principle reason for holding on to my viewpoint is that age is an important aspect of people’s perception of leaders. In organizations, leaders with several years of experience are generally considered highly valuable by others as they can offer prudential guidance. Therefore, subordinates tend to look up to aged leaders with wisdom as a role model whilst holding the perception that young leaders are immature. A further reason for my opinion is experience is the teacher of all things, a prerequisite for leadership roles. It is of paramount importance that the organization is being led by veteran managers with deep knowledge of industry in which they are operating. Most specifically, young leaders often lack strategic perceptive as the ability to look far forward can only be strengthened by past experiences and lessons learnt. Lastly, while younger managers are relentless in their pursuit of perfection, they may stretch team members beyond their reach. On the other hand, their experienced counterparts thrive on challenges as they are risk-adverse, setting feasible goals and they do not seek validation from other people. Challenging the status quo is important; however, it is crucial for a leader to effectively spearhead the followers without putting intolerable pressure on them. In conclusion, it is my firm believe that young people are not suitable for managerial roles. It is because people highly perceived older people as leaders, leading without experience would be tantamount to failure, and younger leaders may wear teammates out with unrealistic goals. Given this situation, it is recommended that age should still be an important factor when considering someone for leadership role.
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. I completely disagree with

this opinion as I
personally
believe older
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bring higher value to the table.

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reason for holding on to my viewpoint is that age is an
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important
aspect

of
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people’s
perception of
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leaders
. In organizations,
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with several years of experience

are
generally
considered
highly
valuable by others as they can offer prudential guidance.

Therefore
, subordinates tend to look up to aged
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leaders
with wisdom as a
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role
model whilst

holding the perception that
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young
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leaders
are immature.

A
further
reason for my opinion is experience is the teacher of all things, a

prerequisite for
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leadership
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roles
. It is of paramount importance that the organization is
being led
by veteran managers with deep knowledge of industry in which they are operating. Most

specifically
,
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young
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leaders
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often
lack strategic perceptive as the ability to look far forward

can
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only
be strengthened
by
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past experiences
and lessons
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learnt
.

Lastly
, while younger managers are relentless in their pursuit of perfection, they may

stretch team members beyond their reach.
On the other hand
, their experienced

counterparts thrive on challenges as they are
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risk
-adverse, setting feasible
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goals and
they do

not seek validation from other
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people
. Challenging the status quo is
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important
;
however
, it is

crucial for a
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leader
to
effectively
spearhead the followers without putting intolerable pressure

on them.

In conclusion
, it is my firm believe that
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young
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people
are not suitable for managerial

roles. It is
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because
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people
highly
perceived older
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people
as
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, leading without

experience would be tantamount to failure, and younger
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leaders
may wear teammates out

with unrealistic goals.
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this situation, it
is recommended
that age should
still
be an

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important
factor when considering someone for
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leadership
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.
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IELTS essay Most leaders or directors generally belong to an older age group, but some people believe that young leaders are better.

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