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Human activity is making the earth a worse place to live.

Human activity is making the earth a worse place to live. N8GRm
Whether human activity causes the earth to be a worse place for living or not seems to be controversial. Some people argue that the earth and its bad situation are not related to human activities. However, I tend to believe that humans by using fossil fuels and deforestation, change the earth into a worth place to live. The primary reason why I am supporting my idea lies in the fact that people using too much fossil fuels cause air pollution. Because of the air pollution, people and other creatures suffer and have a poor life. In other words, people and other creatures’ longevity have decreased. Also, using fossil fuels causes increase global warming. Indeed, global warming and air pollution are two main implications of using fossil fuels, which make the earth not a suitable place to live for whole creatures. Another subtle point that I should consider is the fact that for so many years, humans are using natural resources such as forests and underground water supplies cause to damage to the environment. Humans by deforestation activities cause to destroy animals’ habitation. As a result, the whole ecosystem has been suffered. Based on a comprehensive study has been done by Tehran University, more than sixty percentages of forests are destroyed by human activities. Furthermore, they have shown that these destroyed areas will not be prepared for people even thirty years later. According to the reasons that have been discussed in the preceding paragraphs, it can be claimed that some human activities such as: extracting and using fossil fuels, deforestation, and destroying some ecosystems the earth turns into a worthy place to live. I strongly suggest that governments should pay more attention to this situation and find a solution to improve them.
Whether
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causes
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to be a worse
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place
for living or not seems to be controversial.
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argue that the
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earth
and its
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bad
situation are not related to
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human
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activities
.
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, I tend to believe that
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humans
by using
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fossil
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fuels
and deforestation,
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change
the
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earth
into a worth
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place
to
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live
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The primary reason why I am supporting my
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lies in the fact that
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people
using too much
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fuels
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cause
air pollution.
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Because
of the air pollution,
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people
and other creatures suffer and have a poor life.
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,
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people
and other creatures’ longevity have decreased.
Also
, using
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fossil
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fuels
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causes
increase global warming.
Indeed
, global warming and air pollution are two main implications of using
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fossil
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fuels
, which
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make
the
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earth
not a suitable
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place
to
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live
for whole creatures.

Another subtle point that I should consider is the fact that for
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years,
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humans
are using natural resources such as forests and underground water supplies
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cause
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to damage
to the environment.
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Humans
by deforestation
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activities
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cause
to
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destroy
animals’ habitation.
As a result
, the whole ecosystem has
been suffered
. Based on a comprehensive study has
been done
by Tehran University, more than sixty percentages of forests are
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destroyed
by
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activities
.
Furthermore
, they have shown that these
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destroyed
areas will not
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for
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people
even thirty years later.

According to the reasons that have
been discussed
in the preceding paragraphs, it can
be claimed
that
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human
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such as: extracting and using
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fossil
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fuels
, deforestation, and destroying
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some
ecosystems the
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earth
turns into a worthy
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to
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live
. I
strongly
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governments
should pay more attention to this situation and find a solution to
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improve
them.
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IELTS essay Human activity is making the earth a worse place to live.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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