Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Most countries want to improve the standard of living through economic development, however, others think the social value is lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages? v.2

Most countries want to improve the standard of living through economic development, however, others think the social value is lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2
Economic development is essential for any country because the economic condition of a country will leave a very heavy impact on the daily routines of the citizens of that country. The economic development is directly linked to the better living standards of the people of the country. If any country wants to provide a better living standard to the citizens and wants to provide essential needs of living (i. e. food, clothes and shelter) to every citizen, a country should be capable and have strong economic development. If economic development is up to the mark, the living standards would be improved automatically. Through stable economic conditions job opportunities will be created, circulation of money in the market will take place in a suitable manner. I think if any country puts all the focus to improve the standard of living through economic development, citizens of that country will have to work hard and have to spend most of their time in their work and as a result, the social value and social life of the people will cut off. Because economic stability comes in result of impressive hard work and one should sacrifice something in order to earn another thing. I personally believe that economic development is the best and most appropriate option for good living standards and the advantages of that development always outweigh the disadvantages. Economically developed nations do not suffer from social moral and social bonding. Rather, it is deteriorating in countries where economic development is yet to achieve. In conclusion, economic development is the most important part of a nation’s progress and it does not mean that the development will degrade the social values.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Economic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
development
is essential for any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economic
condition of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
heavy impact on the daily routines of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
of that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
development
is
directly
linked to the better
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
standards
of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
. If any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
wants to provide a better
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
standard
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
and wants to provide essential needs of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
(
There should be no space here: "i.e.".
i. e.
food, clothes and shelter) to every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizen
, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
should be capable and have strong
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economic
development.

If
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
development
is up to the mark, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
standards
would be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
automatically
. Through stable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economic
conditions job opportunities will
be created
, circulation of money in the market will take place
Consider replacing "in a suitable manner" with the adverb for "suitable"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a suitable manner
. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
if any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
puts all the focus to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
standard
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
through
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
development
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
of that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
work
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
spend most of their time in their work and
as a result
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
value and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
life of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
off.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economic
stability
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
in result of impressive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work and one should sacrifice something in order to earn another thing.

I
personally
believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
development
is the best and most appropriate option for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
standards
and the advantages of that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
development
always outweigh the disadvantages.
Economically
developed nations do not suffer from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
moral and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
bonding.
Rather
, it is deteriorating in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
where
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
development
is
yet
to achieve.

In conclusion
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
development
is the most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
part of a nation’s progress and it does not mean that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
development
will degrade the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
values.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Most countries want to improve the standard of living through economic development, however, others think the social value is lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts