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More than one university degree is required to get ahead in many professions today. In the future, it is likely that people will attain a number of degrees before even starting work. Respond to this argument

More than one university degree is required to get ahead in many professions today. In the future, it is likely that people will attain a number of degrees before even starting work. Respond to this argument lejGQ
It is true that academic qualification is inevitable to get an esteemed position in many professions. Some students are degraded from companies as per the single degree and which would lead to fruitless effect on society and forthcoming future to find a job with lack of multiple degree. However, in this essay disagree with the statement because, having a double degree makes up knowledge and problem solving skills for the leaders. Knowledge and academic qualification is the corner stone of any prominent professions. Students or employees with double degree often get predominant chance to obtain lead role in terms of linguistic and sustainable academic proficiency. As per the qualified degree students could achieve enough ideas and skills to solve the problem arise inside and outside company or from other sectors. Furthermore, students with multiple degree would analyse the issues and targeting the proper decisions for enhancement of company. Owing to the fact that, many professions are looking for employees with couple of degree than single degree holders for the development of industry. For example, leading Malaysian company searching for manager for city region to get ride of mistakes happened previous year by the effect of poor academic qualified person. It is often argued that, multiple degree makes age over to get a good job and become financial crisis to many. While, people those who have more than one degree would be suitable for higher rank position in professions or companies. Such as, master degree would obtain as per the limited age duration if there were any other lagging of university papers. Moreover, many banks and student support plan offered to student loans and facilities to achieve goals. For instance, PhD program conduct by university of Hyderabad explain that have had a master degree or multiple degree in same subjects ascertain doctoral by the support of bank loan with no interest. To sum up, ascertain enough knowledge and skills through postgraduate or multiple degree often produce indispensable effect on individual and society. Thereby, it is literally fruitless argue to minimize the target to single degree in turn of higher academic qualification makes up the value to the peak in efficiently and effectively.
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academic
qualification is inevitable to
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get
an esteemed position in
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many
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professions
.
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Some
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students
are degraded
from
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companies
as per the single
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degree
and which would lead to fruitless effect on society and forthcoming future to find a job with lack of
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multiple
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degree
.
However
, in this essay disagree with the statement
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because
, having a double
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degree
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makes
up knowledge and problem solving
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skills
for the leaders.

Knowledge and
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academic
qualification is the corner stone of any prominent
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professions
.
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Students
or employees with double
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degree
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often
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get
predominant chance to obtain lead role in terms of linguistic and sustainable
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academic
proficiency. As per the qualified
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degree
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students
could achieve
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enough
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ideas
and
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skills
to solve the problem arise inside and outside
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company
or from other sectors.
Furthermore
,
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students
with
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multiple
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degree
would
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analyse
the issues and targeting the proper decisions for enhancement of
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company
. Owing to the fact that,
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many
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professions
are looking for employees with
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couple of
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degree
than single
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degree
holders for the development of industry.
For example
, leading Malaysian
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company
searching for manager for city region to
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get
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ride
of mistakes happened previous year by the effect of poor
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academic
qualified person. It is
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often
argued that,
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multiple
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degree
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makes
age over to
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get
a
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good
job and become financial crisis to
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many
. While,
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people
those who have more than one
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degree
would be suitable for higher rank position in
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professions
or
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companies
. Such as, master
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degree
would obtain as per the limited age duration if there were any other lagging of university papers.
Moreover
,
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many
banks and
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student
support plan offered to
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student
loans and facilities to achieve goals.
For instance
, PhD program conduct by university of Hyderabad
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explain
that have had a master
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degree
or
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multiple
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degree
in same subjects ascertain doctoral by the support of bank loan with no interest.

To sum up, ascertain
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enough
knowledge and
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skills
through postgraduate or
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multiple
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degree
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often
produce indispensable effect on individual and society. Thereby, it is
literally
fruitless argue to minimize the target to single
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degree
in turn of higher
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academic
qualification
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makes
up the value to the peak in
efficiently
and
effectively
.
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IELTS essay More than one university degree is required to get ahead in many professions today. In the future, it is likely that people will attain a number of degrees before even starting work. Respond to this argument

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
361 words
6.0
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