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More people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. Why?

Minority of individuals wanted to have a birth in their young age than in the past. Personally, I feel that the demerits of this viewpoint are more than its merits. One the one hand, I agree to some extent that there might be some benefits of this trend. As a result, some adults can have a marriage to have children whose parents are very wealthy and are capable of helping them how to control the family and to teach children how to be the best members of society, which is absolutely amazing. However, this may not be the possible solution for that issue in my estimation. On the other and, there are some drawbacks of having children in later age. To begin with, young aged people cannot have children without having marriage or proof certification. For instance, if some persons want to have children in the absence of certification of marriage, it might bring to some kind of serious issues, which brings in the end to go to prison. Moreover, many teenagers are not able to earn enough money to feed their own family, so they should quit to decide having children in their young age, which is unethical in my estimation, thus almost all of them should think carefully before having a marriage. Firstly, they have to learn from their parents such kind of things to look after the family, and also they should be knowledgeable and approachable to secure a white-collar jobs to earn enough money or have a huge amount of remuneration.
Minority of individuals wanted to have a birth in their young age than in the past.
Personally
, I feel that the demerits of this viewpoint are more than its merits.

One
the one hand, I
agree
to
some
extent that there might be
some
benefits of this trend.
As a result
,
some
adults can have a
marriage
to have
children
whose parents are
very
wealthy and are capable of helping them how to control the family and to teach
children
how to be the best members of society, which is
absolutely
amazing.
However
, this may not be the possible solution for that issue in my estimation.

On the other and, there are
some
drawbacks of
having
children
in later age. To
begin
with, young aged
people
cannot have
children
without
having
marriage
or proof certification.
For instance
, if
some
persons want to have
children
in the absence of certification of
marriage
, it might bring to
some
kind of serious issues, which brings in the
end
to go to prison.
Moreover
,
many
teenagers
are not able to earn
enough
money to feed their
own
family,
so
they should quit to decide
having
children
in their young age, which is unethical in my estimation,
thus
almost all of them should
think
carefully
before
having
a
marriage
.
Firstly
, they
have to
learn from their parents such kind of things to look after the family, and
also
they should be knowledgeable and approachable to secure
a white-collar jobs
to earn
enough
money or have a huge amount of remuneration.
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IELTS essay More people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. Why?

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
255 words
5.5
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