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More people are choosing to live in the city, and thinks that it is much better than living in the countryside. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

More people are choosing to live in the city, and thinks that it is much better than living in the countryside. with this opinion? PMn6d
In the hustle and bustle of society, many people choose for themselves life and path of their own, some say living in the city is very good and is more adaptable. However, living in an urban or rural country is determined by many factors and needs, wherever you live, there will be different advantages and disadvantages. Admittedly, life in the city is really modern and the conditions for study and work are quite stable. The transportation system, the advancement of technology helps people to access new lives instead of the backward life as before. This helps people train their minds and develop their creative abilities. On the other hand, if living in a rural country with only one equal class, living in the city will be divided into many classes, rich and poor also have. So we understand the flip side of society and practice the virtue of tolerance, and be more open in life. The second is higher job opportunities and the ability to grow, such as starting a small business or small business owner. Besides the benefits, the city has many limitations that need to be overcome, typically the problem of environmental pollution is increasingly serious. Due to the emissions of vehicles polluting the air as well as water sources, in addition to dirty foods, the risk of cardiovascular diseases is very high. In contrast to the city, the countryside has a very fresh atmosphere and a quiet, peaceful life, without the stress of work, it helps to prolong its existence. In addition, the security and security of the countryside are quite high due to crime and social evils are limited. And in particular, the countryside is the place to organize traditional activities such as folk games, singing, dancing. However, the chances of employment are high in rural areas, the chances are very low along with the ability to treat diseases is limited. At the same time, the unemployment rate in rural areas is always higher than in the city and there is a supportive government policy. In conclusion, wherever you live, depending on your ability and economy to choose the right place to live.
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life
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say
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living
in the city is
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good
and is more adaptable.
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living
in an urban or
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rural
country
is determined
by
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many
factors and needs, wherever you
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live
, there will be
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different
advantages and disadvantages.

Admittedly
,
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life
in the city is
really
modern and the conditions for study and work are quite stable. The transportation system, the advancement of technology
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helps
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people
to access new
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lives
instead
of the backward
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life
as
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before
. This
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helps
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people
train their minds and develop their creative
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abilities
.
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, if
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living
in a
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rural
country with
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one equal
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class
,
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in the city will
be divided
into
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many
classes, rich and poor
also
have.
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So
we understand the flip side of society and practice the virtue of tolerance, and be more open in
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life
. The second is higher job opportunities and the
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ability
to grow, such as starting a
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small
business or
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small
business owner.
Besides
the benefits, the city has
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many
limitations that need to
be overcome
,
typically
the problem of environmental pollution is
increasingly
serious. Due to the emissions of vehicles polluting the air
as well
as water sources,
in addition
to dirty foods, the
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risk
of cardiovascular diseases is
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very
high.

In contrast
to the city, the countryside has a
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very
fresh atmosphere and a quiet, peaceful
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life
, without the
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stress
of work, it
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helps
to prolong its existence.
In addition
, the security and security of the countryside are quite high due to crime and social evils
are limited
. And
in particular
, the countryside is the place to organize traditional activities such as folk games, singing, dancing.
However
, the chances of employment are high in
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rural
areas, the chances are
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very
low along with the
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ability
to treat diseases
is limited
. At the same time, the unemployment rate in
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rural
areas is always higher than in the city and there is a supportive
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government
policy.

In conclusion
, wherever you
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live
, depending on your
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ability
and economy to choose the right place to
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live
.
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IELTS essay More people are choosing to live in the city, and thinks that it is much better than living in the countryside. with this opinion?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
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