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More children in developed countries

More children in developed countries DN8LE
Obesity is an epidemic that threatens the existence of mankind. in virtually developed nations, rates of overweight have been rising at an alarming rate. This essay will discuss the main causes of obesity and its adverse effects. firt and foremost, due to excess consumption of junk food, sugary drinks, sedentary lifestyle and lack of physical activities leading to fatness. At very young age, children faces problem
Obesity is an epidemic that threatens the existence of mankind.
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in
virtually
developed nations, rates of overweight have been rising at an alarming rate. This essay will discuss the main causes of obesity and its adverse effects.

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firt
and foremost, due to excess consumption of junk food, sugary drinks, sedentary lifestyle and lack of physical activities leading to fatness. At
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young age, children faces
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problem
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IELTS essay More children in developed countries

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
65 words
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