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More and more students in university are not choosing science. why it is happening. what ate its effects.

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Science plays a vital role in the development of the world. However, today fewer amount pupils choose science to study because of business subject which offers good job opportunity as well as handsome salary. The predominant reasons of not enrolling in sciences department is because of expensive fees. In most of the countries, students are willing to study biology, chemistry and so on but they become unsuccessful to learn it due to high rate of fees. In fact the scholarship award are also most render to those pupils who are privileged or have powerful background. As a result, capable leaners are negotiated and unfortunately register in other majors. Beside this, the second fundamental cause of having minority of students in science class is because of business inspiration or motivation. In this 21st century, famous inspiration is from business background. Therefore, young people desire to become a businessman in the future. For example; Elon musk, Steven job, Bill gate and soon they encourage individual directly or indirectly to involve in business sectors. Due to the fact, majority of young pupils engage mostly in management facility. Subsequently, there are various positive and negative effects but the negative effects over-wigh positive one. The main effects of having few science students are less innovation. While, today each and every things which are invented is through science and due to which people have a plethora of facilities. For instance; in this cutting edge era, because of science and scientist, an impossible medicine or treatments are present from which life of thousand people are save. However, in the present days, tiny amount of individuals are fascinated towards sciences. Consequently, there will be less percent of innovation and creativity will be happened which really influenced whole universe. To encapsulate, I believe to enhance the number of students in science facility is by affordable fee because there are a magnitude of pupils who disparately wants to study distinct science program but chased their dream due to overbudget fees.
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subject which offers
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job opportunity
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as handsome salary.

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department is
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fees
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students
are willing to study biology, chemistry and
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they become unsuccessful to learn it
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due
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fees
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pupils
who
are privileged
or have powerful background.
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leaners
are negotiated
and unfortunately register in other majors. Beside this, the second fundamental cause of having minority of
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science
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sectors.
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sciences
.
Consequently
, there will be less percent of innovation and creativity will
be happened
which
really
influenced whole universe.

To encapsulate, I believe to enhance the number of
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in
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science
facility is by affordable
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fee
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IELTS essay More and more students in university are not choosing science. why it is happening. what ate its effects.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
6.0
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