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the aim of prison should be to re-educate rather than punish

the aim of prison should be to re-educate rather than punish Ykn3d
in modern society, there is a new debate which open-minded and elite groups of people are talking about and the discussion is assessing the main purpose of prison should be rehabilitation or punishment. firstly, this is important to remember, perpetrators irrespective of what kind of crime they committed, won't learn their lessons unless they face imprisonment. moreover, criminals have to feel the shadow of the law even if they committed a petty crime the government would send them to maximize security jail and as old people say: what goes around comes around.
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to remember, perpetrators irrespective of what kind of crime they committed, won't learn their lessons unless they face imprisonment.
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IELTS essay the aim of prison should be to re-educate rather than punish

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
92 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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